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    my silence

    o.o this is an old poem i wrote....

    I wipe the tears running down my face
    as im taken into the darkness.
    You tear my heart, but don't feel its pain.
    I wonder why these tears fall and I know the answer. I love you.
    I love you forever, promising myself eternal heartache. I yell from the top of my lungs
    but you do not hear me.
    It is a silence that burns in my soul
    Last edited by Blou; May 28, 2006 at 01:56 PM.

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    Re: my silence

    *claps*

    that is really good but that sound like me though


    Thank you soooo much equinn for leting me us this pic of your!!!!!

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    Re: my silence

    ..................^//^ thank you

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    Re: my silence

    this sounds like something happening to u at a particular time Blou. Anyways, i like then again i like dark, sad, love poems.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: my silence

    well....im glad you like it, jason

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    Re: my silence

    Woot! Finally a poem with a little sustenance.

    I wipe the tears running down my face
    as im taken into the darkness.

    I wonder why [those] tears [fell].
    I know the answer. I love you.

    I love you forever, promising myself eternal [heartache].
    You [tore] my heart, but don't feel its pain.

    I yell from the top of my lungs
    but you do not hear me.

    It is a silence that burns in my soul
    The poem would have beautiful it went like this. You have talent. I would really like for you to spend time on the editting process and try to mix your stanzas up. That one big stanza thing wasnt doing it for the poem. You had atleast two different emotions.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: my silence

    This poems really great good job. I'm really liking the way it's set up.
    Channy

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    Re: my silence

    *smiles* thank you, guys....^ ^

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