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    Re: my silence

    Neatly written, Blou!!!!! Short, simple, and meaningful. That's what makes a poem beautiful. Keep up the great work, and we all hope to see a lot of your works. Thanks for sharing. As for the corrections, Kasai-Sami covered it all.

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    Re: my silence

    This poem inspires me.
    I will make something that will make you take notes ok.
    BRB.
    (Good poem by the way)

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    Re: my silence

    @viper:....thank you *Smiles* im glad it inspires you...^ ^
    @kedar:thnx...and i'll be posting more of my poems.....eventually

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    Re: my silence

    Quote Originally Posted by Blou
    o.o this is an old poem i wrote....

    I wipe the tears running down my face
    as im taken into the darkness.
    You tear my heart, but don't feel its pain.
    I wonder why these tears fall and I know the answer. I love you.
    I love you forever, promising myself eternal heartache. I yell from the top of my lungs
    but you do not hear me.
    It is a silence that burns in my soul
    Well..... I didnt feel it had a good flow 2 it. Its meaningful, yes.... but it didnt really click with me.
    The last statement however... thats a keeper right there. ^_^

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