My Smile

Can you see through my smile?
I'm trying so hard.
Is it cracked, broken. I will try harder,
No still?
It's so hard to keep this smiled plastered here
upon my face.
So hard not to Frown,
Is this what you want.
A smile, never wavering?
If that is it, my smile continues...
Even if i want to cry....
I need to smile to hide the pain,
I need you to keep me sane.
Name it, and its yours.
I'll give you anything.
But please don't ask me to smile anymore.
I'd do anything for you,
i will hide my pain from you
Please tell me to hate you...
Be cruel, be mean. Please do this one thing for me.
Maybe then i can finally cease to love you...

<not really a poem...but its a personal thing to me. Very close to my heart. Comments please and critisizm is always excepted.>

its nice, how u opened up like that.

lol. I can kinda relate to this. ^_^

Meaningless smiles hidden behind un-noticed souls. :p Exactly how I feel on most days. Wearing a smile just to keep society happy.....
HOwever I got a little lost towards the end. :confused: ..... It would hav been better if u mentioned wat was said in the last statement throughout the poem. Just 2 elaborate on the true purpose. Well thats my opinion at least.

It was great though. You'll improve. ^_^

requesting to take tht mask off............asking ppl around u to take those damn foolish masks off......it's more of a mish mash of wut ur feeling at the moment..not of as good as ur poem I Died a Death but still alright...keep improving tho.

^BladeX: Yeah i think this ones confuseing...even for me. i JUST wrote it when i was typing it down lmao. But what the heck i suppose. And like i said below the said "poem", its not exactly a poem...more of a letter like quality i guess lol.

God Guy can't u stop riting these awsome poems? well it is good...not good great...ok bye (i can't think)

It's a very good poem with no grammer mistakes. keep up the good work.:thumb:

Nice poem you are very talented. Good job!