My Story

KuwiRules145 · May 30, 2007, 06:20 PM

One boy met me
He was that first thing I see
But I was blind
He kept a appearing in my mind
So now I'm scared
Finding out I really cared
So I shut my eyes
Pretending it was all lies

But I was wrong
I can't believe it took me so long
Now I believe
You were that everything I received
So now I know I really love you
Making me say I do
Your everything I always thought
Making me always love you a lot

So we know
Now our hearts aren't very low
But trouble came along
As our feeling to become a song
My heart it burns for being so lame
So I quietly turned off my eyes with shame
Finding myself waiting for my knight drifting away
As I wait on that same hill everyday

I don't want to hide my feelings too
All I want was only you
There I finally kissed your face
And prepared for what we could embrace
I look at the sky for my cloud
As it stays still catching my doubts
But I don't care anymore
As we both sat on that same shore

I just want to live happily ever after
As our family is happy with laughter

Hope everyone likes it.

fallenangel25 · May 30, 2007, 06:34 PM

awwww you wrote me a poem! lol j/k

very sweet poem. nice length,and I can really feel the emotion youve put forth! cant wait till ure next one.

KuwiRules145 · May 30, 2007, 06:41 PM

I thank you a lot for your comment but remember it could be any boy I know ok. But that boy should know who he is. I have lots of guy friends so its hard to tell who's it for. And I know who's it for and he does too.

sangogirl · May 30, 2007, 08:11 PM

i like it. i can tell you put a lot of effort into it. it like you said tells a story. from begining to end it's like a story being told.

KuwiRules145 · May 30, 2007, 08:19 PM

I thank you so much sangogirl as well! I thank you two so much right now.

ChaosXIII · May 30, 2007, 08:26 PM

hey nice poem i havent heard one that wasn't basically the same as everyone elses that iv'e heard. it was really nice and had really good detail i like that

KuwiRules145 · May 30, 2007, 08:47 PM

Thank you so much as well! I'm really happy you guys a lot!!!! I thank you all!

xxoxx · May 30, 2007, 08:52 PM

mabye i came in wrong place cuse this poem for boys ...but it touch as i mean the girl ...
that was very romanitic poem and explain mabye how the people love ...but it was very nice ...i like it ...keep up ..hope to see more form you ...

*Lasura* · May 31, 2007, 02:36 AM

I like this poem very much... You have a wonderful story here, a wonderful story indeed, full of adventure, love, exitment and waiting...
The only thing I didn't like was the first line: "One boy meet me". But it's just because of grammar...

It didn't buzz me in other places but this line cought my attention badly...
But I enjoyed reading it and when I finnished reading it I was happy I decided to read it!!!!!

KuwiRules145 · May 31, 2007, 08:50 AM

Sorry I forgot! I'll just fix it right now and thank you for your comments as well!!!!

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · May 31, 2007, 10:06 AM

i like this poem the love the passion its all there and
it was a poem about happiness its cool that you could make one after everythig i have read about why people cant make a happy poem.

this one proves it donst have to be sad to be a poem which i like alot
i cant wait to read another

May 30, 2007, 06:20 PM	#1 (permalink)
KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 962 Thanks: 3 Thanked 23 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,154	My Story One boy met me He was that first thing I see But I was blind He kept a appearing in my mind So now I'm scared Finding out I really cared So I shut my eyes Pretending it was all lies But I was wrong I can't believe it took me so long Now I believe You were that everything I received So now I know I really love you Making me say I do Your everything I always thought Making me always love you a lot So we know Now our hearts aren't very low But trouble came along As our feeling to become a song My heart it burns for being so lame So I quietly turned off my eyes with shame Finding myself waiting for my knight drifting away As I wait on that same hill everyday I don't want to hide my feelings too All I want was only you There I finally kissed your face And prepared for what we could embrace I look at the sky for my cloud As it stays still catching my doubts But I don't care anymore As we both sat on that same shore I just want to live happily ever after As our family is happy with laughter Hope everyone likes it. __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡ Last edited by KuwiRules145; May 31, 2007 at 08:51 AM. Reason: Grammer mistake hehehe....
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May 30, 2007, 06:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
fallenangel25 Newbie Join Date: May 2007 Location: Inbetween Heaven & Hell Posts: 85 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 310	Re: My Story awwww you wrote me a poem! lol j/k very sweet poem. nice length,and I can really feel the emotion youve put forth! cant wait till ure next one.
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May 30, 2007, 06:41 PM	#3 (permalink)
KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 962 Thanks: 3 Thanked 23 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,154	Re: My Story I thank you a lot for your comment but remember it could be any boy I know ok. But that boy should know who he is. I have lots of guy friends so its hard to tell who's it for. And I know who's it for and he does too. __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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May 30, 2007, 08:11 PM	#4 (permalink)
sangogirl Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: TEXAS Posts: 333 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,270	Re: My Story i like it. i can tell you put a lot of effort into it. it like you said tells a story. from begining to end it's like a story being told. __________________
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May 30, 2007, 08:19 PM	#5 (permalink)
KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 962 Thanks: 3 Thanked 23 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,154	Re: My Story I thank you so much sangogirl as well! I thank you two so much right now. __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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May 30, 2007, 08:26 PM	#6 (permalink)
ChaosXIII Newbie Join Date: May 2007 Location: in the shadows Posts: 9 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 10	Re: My Story hey nice poem i havent heard one that wasn't basically the same as everyone elses that iv'e heard. it was really nice and had really good detail i like that __________________ Iv'e come to deliver some bad luck
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May 30, 2007, 08:47 PM	#7 (permalink)
KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 962 Thanks: 3 Thanked 23 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,154	Re: My Story Thank you so much as well! I'm really happy you guys a lot!!!! I thank you all! __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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May 30, 2007, 08:52 PM	#8 (permalink)
xxoxx Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: 無くなった Posts: 353 Thanks: 3 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 3,506	Re: My Story mabye i came in wrong place cuse this poem for boys ...but it touch as i mean the girl ... that was very romanitic poem and explain mabye how the people love ...but it was very nice ...i like it ...keep up ..hope to see more form you ... __________________ Just Try It
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May 31, 2007, 02:36 AM	#9 (permalink)
Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,866 Thanks: 56 Thanked 32 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 49,122	Re: My Story I like this poem very much... You have a wonderful story here, a wonderful story indeed, full of adventure, love, exitment and waiting... The only thing I didn't like was the first line: "One boy meet me". But it's just because of grammar... It didn't buzz me in other places but this line cought my attention badly... But I enjoyed reading it and when I finnished reading it I was happy I decided to read it!!!!! __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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May 31, 2007, 08:50 AM	#10 (permalink)
KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 962 Thanks: 3 Thanked 23 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 13,154	Re: My Story Sorry I forgot! I'll just fix it right now and thank you for your comments as well!!!! __________________ ♡♥♡♥No matter what I'll always love you for Eternity...I love you Kyle♥♡♥♡ Never let me go... hold me tight and love me like I do ♡♥Anime Life♥♡
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,783 Thanks: 20 Thanked 19 Times in 18 Posts Credits: 2,476	Re: My Story i like this poem the love the passion its all there and it was a poem about happiness its cool that you could make one after everythig i have read about why people cant make a happy poem. this one proves it donst have to be sad to be a poem which i like alot i cant wait to read another __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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