Thread: My teen years

The constant use of the dots arent needed to give the poem a needed effect.

So i just need 2 leave a blank there...ok...i get..
thx sheesh..i think this poem suks...

It doesnt suck. the dots are just annoying and unneeded.

really? it does nt suk? that gives me bak a lil of my confidence bak ^^
ty...

Very nice poem, ray-chan!!! Grammar o.< kills me!!! But other than that... I loved it!!! Tells how we have no control over the time life gives us to live. Nice poem, ray. Keep it up

Thx...grammatical errors..pls point it out for me :/ will u whitey

Of course I can Ray-chan! Anything to help better your writing!

It has been like forever...
My teen years shall leave me,
after all those time...
It won't be long till it's gone...
My teen years shall leave me.
The cruel and cold thing,
called time will take it away...
and when that time comes..
i shall walk no more as a teen,
but as an adult.

Just like a butterfly,
I have reached another phase...
another phase if methamorphosis.
Now the question is...
Will i be a beautiful butterfly?
or a grey moth?
I wondered...
Have i done the right choice...
Was everything i did in it was sufficient...
Was it worth it?
Have i wasted all those time?

Wretched time...How cruel u are,
How dare you...Why are you taking it away...
You left me behind...Make me struggle even more...
Struggling to keep up with u...
My teenage years will be no more...
Adulthood is near...Too near~!
NO~! Not yet..Not now...
I have not done everything i want...
Everything i need...
I still have not gone throught everything.

I'm not too sure on the tense you're using, but those are most of the mishaps I caught!