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    my wish

    so sick of their voices
    and hating their excuses

    i have seen where it grows
    and where it flows

    why are you so keen
    on someone so mean

    like me

    i like to see
    the ocean and sea

    and talk all day
    in my own way

    and mostly love
    your tales

    i love
    to see you as my love

    why
    can't i

    have my own
    one and only

    i don't know the reason
    for this act of treason

    as i walk through the black
    with everything i lack

    i'm lost
    through her affection
    and through my addiction

    when the end came near
    i realized how much she's dear

    i love her
    and wish to hold her
    in the nights
    till the rise of the suns' lights

    i am not ready to fade
    because i don't want to tell her too late

    how much that i love her
    and belong to her

    i wish to tell you
    i love you
    and i wish to always to be with you

    thats the truest
    and dearest wish
    that i wish to come true
    Last edited by powerxxx; Jul 30, 2006 at 06:50 AM.
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    Re: my wish

    as i walk through the black
    with everything i {lake}

    might wanna fix that, but otherwise pretty good

    thanks to zyta for the sick sig and avy!

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    Re: my wish

    Nice poem powerxxx, keep it up.

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    Re: my wish

    You know, your poetry seems boring if you keep writing it in the same structure. Try something different with the way you want to present the poem.
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