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Old Oct 26, 2007, 06:34 PM   #1 (permalink)
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My wish....

My wish....

I wish
The pain would go away
Of knowing that you’re hurt

I wish
The misery in you heart
That I put there

I wish
The suffering your going though
Would just disappear

I wish
The lies of people around me
To just stop making me doubt

I wish
The conversation I had that one day
To just go away

I wish
The things he said to make me believe
That he was better for me

Yet even if I wish these things
You’ll still be gone
So if I had one wish
You’d be with me again

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Old Oct 27, 2007, 01:00 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: My wish....

Nicely done!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Love the words......and the unique way of the rhyme!!!!!!!!!
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Old Oct 27, 2007, 04:14 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: My wish....

A nice little poem. My suggestion...Make it a little more complex. Try adding more imagery to it.
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Old Oct 27, 2007, 04:29 PM   #4 (permalink)
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nice work!!!!!! luv it!!!! luv to hear from u more!!!
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Old Oct 27, 2007, 08:20 PM   #5 (permalink)
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agreed with tifa

oh yes... nice work indeed ^^ i like it too... it's simple..
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Old Oct 28, 2007, 02:37 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Okay.. Thanks for the feedback you guys. ^-^ I'll write more for you.. ^-^
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