Hi there fellas,
As a few of you requested, I wrote an English poem beside my regular Dutch ones and I now post it here. Maybe it's a little short, but I didn't want to force it longer. I hope you like it.
The dark has long been in my mind,
But with a glance of eye
She tells me I will be alright;
We won’t yet say goodbye.
For mortals always seek a way
To find their very souls;
Yet as time flows, they find delay
And do not reach their goal.
In order to discover truth
And satisfy desire,
We wait for a flower to bloom;
To admire and be admired.
Realizing, take my hand;
Love we can not understand.
Can you see the thoughts behind it? If too many people mention they don't really understand what it says, I'll explain.
Last edited by Dandoria; Sep 21, 2006 at 11:11 AM.
- Darehan ci darevur -
ooooooooo I LUUFFFFF IT SO MANY ITS NOT FUNNY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
but for real i like it lots i can understand some of it but the middel sortof confusses mhey...but for real i luff yuu forever for writing this poem!!!! <3 ok tey bye bye now -runns away-
there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...
The dark has long been in my mind,
But with a glance of eye
She tells me I will be alright;
We won’t yet say goodbye.
I'm not liking the transformation from You, to another person, then to we. And you continue the we pattern through out the poem. I wouldve preferred to read a better transitioning poem.
Seduced by Flesh
To be honest is no sin.You've got a point there, for yourself at least. I personally find it no problem - but that doesn't matter! Always be critic! It was my first attempt to write an English poem, after all. I wouldn't possibly think it were perfect (although Lost_Love appears to think so
). I do have other poems, but they're Dutch...
(darned language)
- Darehan ci darevur -
Hmm...its alright if the poem is short atleast it is meaningful. I love this poem...
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