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    Needs and Wants.

    I need a companion.
    I want a partner for life.
    Is that so wrong?

    I need to succeed.
    I want to feel important.
    Can I prove my worth?

    I need to be happy.
    I want to stop hurting.
    Will I ever heal?

    I need to love.
    I want to be loved back.
    Won't you hold my hand?

    I need to be me.
    I want to be accepted.
    Is that too much?


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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    This poem had made me smile. You better run for cover. LOL I'm just kidding. I liked it. I liked how you put a need then a want then asked a question. It was amazing. Keep up your good work.
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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    If you need something and want something with strong emotion? You wont stand around ask if you can have it. you'd go out and make sure you had it.

    So, the information in this poem? Doesnt interest me. And the wording? It's simple and bland. It seems as if you thought of a bunch of questions and added them to the poem.
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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    If you need something and want something with strong emotion? You wont stand around ask if you can have it. you'd go out and make sure you had it.

    So, the information in this poem? Doesnt interest me. And the wording? It's simple and bland. It seems as if you thought of a bunch of questions and added them to the poem.
    Yes, in fact, I did. Poetry comes from the heart, not from a textbook, my friend...


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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    i like this poem cuz of the flow and the ideas
    this shows me like a need for live like you are starved for the simple needs essential to humans and i love this because ihavent read a poem like this
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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Yes, in fact, I did. Poetry comes from the heart, not from a textbook, my friend...
    First of all, the content of the poem may come from the heart. But the structure in which you write the poem comes from a textbook. Learn about how you will and can write poem before throwing a bunch of words together and calling it art.

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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    "First of all, the content of the poem may come from the heart. But the structure in which you write the poem comes from a textbook. Learn about how you will and can write poem before throwing a bunch of words together and calling it art.

    -69"





    Pronunciation: 'pO-&-trE, -i-trE also 'po(-)i-trE
    Function: noun
    1 a : metrical writing : VERSE b : the productions of a poet : POEMS
    2 : writing that formulates a concentrated imaginative awareness of experience in language chosen and arranged to create a specific emotional response through meaning, sound, and rhythm
    3 a : something likened to poetry especially in beauty of expression b : poetic quality or aspect <the poetry of dance>

    That was taken from the Merriam-Webster online dictionary. And incase you need translation... the definition of poetry means EXPRESSION. Any artist would know... there is no rule to expression, no outline, no structure. Expression comes from our free will, our voices, our minds. The way something is expressed falls souly on the one expressing it.

    See, Everyones opinion is accepted. But, if you want yours to be RESPECTED.. Perhaps try knowing what you're talking about, before you try to speak (or type) a bunch of mindless insults.

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    Re: Needs and Wants.

    I think the simplicity of the poem added to its potency. Well done. I applaud you.

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