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    *Never To Be Free*

    Never to Be Free

    To many feelings
    That must be stopped,
    and locked up.

    But it’s like trying to stop a river,
    And no matter how hard I try,
    No matter how many obstacles I place
    The emotions run free and fly.

    So now I’m taking the emotions
    And locking them up.
    Then I shall throw away the key.
    Never to be free.

    I can’t hurt my friends
    Break my family apart.
    Or tear my loves heart.
    I shall not live.

    But it is best for all.
    If I can’t feel then I can’t hurt.
    If I can’t hurt then everyone can live peacefully.
    Now no one shall fall.

    So I’m locking away my emotions
    And throwing out the key.
    Never to hurt again
    and never to be free.


    I hope that you all like it. Well read away.(^.^)

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    Re: *Never To Be Free*

    Huh? I didn't get some parts but after reading it was clear to me. Sad one though.

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    Re: *Never To Be Free*

    Pretty good poem. It almost sounds suicidal, but I like it.
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    Re: *Never To Be Free*

    Nice freeverse, I could get pass the first stanza. Good job.
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    Re: *Never To Be Free*

    Good poem! ^^ I think it was nice how you were able to build up your emotions up to the end, so it had quite a dramatic feel for me. All in all, it also has nice flow and meaningful thought embedded in the lines. The fact that I could feel the meaning of your poem is a good point, and I love your title. Titles are very important, because it's the first thing that will lure the reader into taking enough interest to consider reading your poem. Keep up the good work!

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