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    Never fully

    I've never really loved anyone truely
    Always half heartedly
    I've never loved fully
    Keeping grounded to myself
    It's always been me alone
    My heart is bruised but still mine
    I wonder if keeping it will kill me
    I've always just turned away
    Oh how it breaks my heart
    I want to tell you I love you
    but how do I do that
    How do I give myself wholey

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    Re: Never fully

    great poem..............(ps, if u find out, tell me)

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    Re: Never fully

    the poem lacked some thing, perhaps spelling and correct punctuation? the use of "ly" completely ruined the flow of the poem. When I took a first look, I thought "yes! A short poem". You've disappointed me. There is room for improvement. The simplicity of the words is what kept my attention.
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