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    New Hope

    This pain I have in side
    Was is caused by you
    Or this never ending sorrow that exist within me?
    Shouldn't I be dead?
    Why must I continue to suffer the way I do?
    My life has been nothing more than a broken vessel
    My heart is nothing more than a crumbling stone
    Isn't there anyone who can fix this?
    My body goes numb for the hope of a new tomorrow
    Holding on to a dream that can never happen
    A shattered hand holding on to a broken reality

    Even so I must hold on
    For the sake of others I must live
    I have to survive in order to save them
    Even if it means...
    Even if it means the lost of my own soul
    I will protect them
    The path I've chosen is lonely
    And the burden is too great to bear
    Though sometimes I look at the sky and wonder
    In the end who will save me?

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    Re: New Hope

    very awesome poem being alone can really test one sanity
    and sometimes test there will to survive or to keep going,
    its a sad part of life that caring for others while putting your self
    second or even last means sacrificing more than anyone will ever truly
    know, but its worth it in the end because the ones you love and want
    to be safe and happy will always have someone there for them.

    this is what i get from this poem and it it really has a lot of emotion in
    it i loved how described the feelings here and i cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: New Hope

    Wow you were right on target. That is exactly what I was going for. I had writer's block for a few months because of some stuff I was going through. But now it seems I'm making a come back. Thanks again for the comment.

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    Re: New Hope

    A few grammar issues.
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