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    To the next life

    In this life....
    Im the posterchild,
    Of all the easily defeated.
    Not someone people value.
    The queen of the uneeded.

    In this life...
    I seem to find myself,
    Always hoping, always wishing.
    For dreams that may never come true,
    Until I make a transition.

    To the next life.
    I'm a caterpiller,
    If you will be my tree.
    Protect my cocoon, 'till I can fly.
    Then, you'll admire me.

    In the next life.
    Im wild flower seeds.
    And you're the first sproutlings to show.
    We'll always be connected.
    We will always grow.

    In the next life.
    I am the sun.
    And you're my sky, so blue.
    Then clouds come, and cover me.
    I fail in the next life too?
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: To the next life

    Wow, this is one of my favorite poems from you now.

    It's kinda romantic and sad at the same time.

    It really describes how you love a person so much in this life and you wonder, will he be your love and protect you in the next.

    Please correct me if I am wrong on the subject. lol

    Also, nice use of imagery and I hope to see a lot more like this.

    Great work!


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: To the next life

    You're right on.... hell, you said it better than I did.

    Thank you for your possitive feedback. Im trying so hard to smile today... and you helped....
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: To the next life

    the catpiller part made smile becuase i know thats true sad but yet loveing i love how used nature in this poem i never see that anymore excellent work peach
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    Re: To the next life

    THE PASSION!!!!! THE EMOTION IN IT!!!!!! It's so AWESOME!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO GREAT!!! SO AMAZING AS I WOULD SAY!!!!!!!! I hope to see more!!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: To the next life

    This was really sad like everyone else said. But at the same time the emotion behind it is so melencholy but pure and STRONG at the same time. It's beautiful.

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    Re: To the next life

    Truly a great poem Peach! I like the images your poem puts into my head and you make me honored to have written a poem for a spoken word artist! You voice is being heard here on AO!

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    Re: To the next life

    It strange how people say nice things..... and yet I cant stop crying, T_T...
    Thanks though.... It means alot that I still have a voice.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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