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    The Night

    The night, the night
    Lack of color, yet full of delight!
    Bold and black, bold and daring
    Certainly there is no comparing!
    The night, the night
    Behold its splendor and its spite!
    As the young lay down their head
    Up, comes up, comes forth-springs forth the dead!
    Up from the bitter roots they dance
    In this frolic scenic romance
    The moon engulfs the the starry sky
    Enveloping where the people lie
    Illuminating where the people die!
    The dead now arisen, full of joy
    Orbs of gold twinkle, sprinkle
    On the day, the gold deploy!
    Sparkling upon the shadow-cast scene
    Where silhouettes of tree, rolling hills be; in-between
    Blades of grass dull out into grey
    Into the canvas, it slowly fades!
    Blends with gold and silver darkened shades!
    Still and silent, solid with a breeze
    A gentle kiss, upon the cheek
    Tainted, painted black with ease
    Watch as the evenings slowly freeze
    Painted-with a subtle glow
    Reacquainted-whistling among the trees
    Tranquility one only knows
    If one decides to venture outside
    In the night; man pulls the covers and tries to fight
    Fight-sleeping away, away with foolish pride
    For I will live again tonight!

    Death is as generation is, a composition of like elements, and a decompostion into the same.

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    Re: The Night

    Very inspiring poem. Reminds me for some reason of Nightmare before Christmas. Very intriguing. Great work, Moose.

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    Re: The Night

    I'll have to say.. i love the rhymes :3 .. however the flow seem a bit abrupt to me.. : / must've been the exclamation marks probably.. it felt like it was forced.. and unnatural...

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    Re: The Night

    I really like it, thx for it

    The moon engulfs the the starry sky
    Enveloping where the people lie
    Illuminating where the people die!
    The dead now arisen, full of joy


    Really like this part

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    Re: The Night

    Your welcome Im glad you like it. You seem to like death a lot huh? lol

    Death is as generation is, a composition of like elements, and a decompostion into the same.

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