As night falls..

*RayMe* · Feb 17, 2007, 11:36 PM

The sun is setting now,
the once bright yellow ball,
turned bright orange ball,
the whole scene turns to orange too,
it is now dusk on this land,
this marks that the night is falling.

The birds and crows flies back to thier nests,
the wholse scene is noisy,
full of bird's chirping,
this is otherwise to them,
the creatures of the night,
them who sleeps the whole day,
they shall wait silently,
they waited till darkness takes over.

It is night now,
the dark land is a playground,
a playground for the night creatures,
a brightly white ball emerges,
it takes the sun's position,
at the same time,
the sky shall be filled with diamonds,
sparkling and shining diamonds,
and the milky way is there too,
it decorates the sky along with the diamonds.

Little by little,
after some time,
a light shines frm the east,
when this happens,
the creatures of the night,
returns to their hideout,
while the creatures of the day,
ends their slumber.

This is a cycle,
a cycle which connects,
connects with living things,
a cycle of life,
the cycle which will never stop,
until the end of time.

another poem abt night...i like night...lol ^^

*Kasai* · Feb 18, 2007, 05:19 AM

Hmm. A different type of punctuation would help the flow. You know, like the correct one.

*RayMe* · Feb 18, 2007, 08:45 AM

well how to do that..?
an example pls

it's a little bit hard 2 understand...

god of death · Feb 18, 2007, 09:02 AM

good job i enjoyed this one very much, regardless of the pun and spelling mistakes which werent hard to figure out. you like the night? good the night is the best time.

*RayMe* · Feb 18, 2007, 09:13 AM

good things happen everynight...thats why i like night hehe..good thing u agreed with me

err did i made a spelling mistake..sheesh which 1..correct me pls dude...sigh..i need 2 improve my english...

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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	As night falls.. The sun is setting now, the once bright yellow ball, turned bright orange ball, the whole scene turns to orange too, it is now dusk on this land, this marks that the night is falling. The birds and crows flies back to thier nests, the wholse scene is noisy, full of bird's chirping, this is otherwise to them, the creatures of the night, them who sleeps the whole day, they shall wait silently, they waited till darkness takes over. It is night now, the dark land is a playground, a playground for the night creatures, a brightly white ball emerges, it takes the sun's position, at the same time, the sky shall be filled with diamonds, sparkling and shining diamonds, and the milky way is there too, it decorates the sky along with the diamonds. Little by little, after some time, a light shines frm the east, when this happens, the creatures of the night, returns to their hideout, while the creatures of the day, ends their slumber. This is a cycle, a cycle which connects, connects with living things, a cycle of life, the cycle which will never stop, until the end of time. another poem abt night...i like night...lol ^^ __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: As night falls.. Hmm. A different type of punctuation would help the flow. You know, like the correct one. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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god of death Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: brimstone graveyard Posts: 156 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 362	Re: As night falls.. good job i enjoyed this one very much, regardless of the pun and spelling mistakes which werent hard to figure out. you like the night? good the night is the best time. __________________ I am the God Of Death, Reaper of the souls, hunter of the darkness...... http://z13.invisionfree.com/Deaths_doorway/index.php this is my site come and see me there sometime!
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: As night falls.. good things happen everynight...thats why i like night hehe..good thing u agreed with me err did i made a spelling mistake..sheesh which 1..correct me pls dude...sigh..i need 2 improve my english... __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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