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    No Sunshine

    There ain't no sunshine left
    you walk around, watching your every step
    hoping and praying you don't get checked
    yea this is life
    avoiding getting robbed, or mobbed
    while walking down the street
    so you go and get some heat
    and its layin in your pocket,
    and you can hear your heart beat
    and its stil in your pocket
    then he comes to you
    and you cock it
    pop it
    die B!tch die!
    he won't rob you anymore
    in your bed you lay
    you don't even snore
    you sit there remembering that day
    you killed a man
    in fear, of getting robbed and shot
    but that's life
    better you than him right?
    and so.....
    Ain't much more sunshine
    whilel you sittin in the floor wastin away
    and dyin
    Ain't no sunshine in there its on...
    only darkness everyday
    ain't no sunshine when its on,
    cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
    everytime, cuz we don't play.
    and in the end
    we all die one day
    You should stop talking about your dreams, and start making them.

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    Re: No Sunshine

    nice one brother, it looks like you have been doing your homework! keep it up man.

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    Re: No Sunshine

    very nice hun, i like it even more wen you read it over the phone and added emphasis, i wuv ur voice!!
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    Re: No Sunshine

    "As darkness falls, night unfolds ebon wings to wrap the world in its dark embrace"-Joeseph Vargo "Forever longing for an espace, only to get yelled at in my face, People are too complicated, love has become so over-rated, so I'm done and I'm gone"-Laren these are quotes that went through my head while I read your beautifully, well-thought out poem...sorry if I offend you by this comment, by the way

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    Re: No Sunshine

    Quote Originally Posted by N.Y._Soulja View Post
    ain't no sunshine when its on,
    cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
    everytime, cuz we don't play.
    and in the end
    we all die one day
    was this inspired at all by the song "aint no sunshine"? These last few lines remind me of the song.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: No Sunshine

    It sounds like a song i have heard before.Using the word sunshine to create a darkness mood is great and it flows well.Keep up the good effort.

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    Re: No Sunshine

    It's a song right? Still capitalization would work. Keep it up ^_^

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    Re: No Sunshine

    >.> Who you?

    Jkin, Anyways I really like this piece ^^ Very true words, harsh as it is, fav part was this-
    Ain't no sunshine in there its on...
    only darkness everyday
    ain't no sunshine when its on,
    cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
    everytime, cuz we don't play.
    and in the end
    we all die one day
    especially the last line, nicely done!

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