No Sunshine

*N.Y._Soulja* · Jul 09, 2006, 03:08 AM

There ain't no sunshine left
you walk around, watching your every step
hoping and praying you don't get checked
yea this is life
avoiding getting robbed, or mobbed
while walking down the street
so you go and get some heat
and its layin in your pocket,
and you can hear your heart beat
and its stil in your pocket
then he comes to you
and you cock it
pop it
die B!tch die!
he won't rob you anymore
in your bed you lay
you don't even snore
you sit there remembering that day
you killed a man
in fear, of getting robbed and shot
but that's life
better you than him right?
and so.....
Ain't much more sunshine
whilel you sittin in the floor wastin away
and dyin
Ain't no sunshine in there its on...
only darkness everyday
ain't no sunshine when its on,
cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
everytime, cuz we don't play.
and in the end
we all die one day

*ketaro* · Jul 09, 2006, 04:53 PM

nice one brother, it looks like you have been doing your homework! keep it up man.

animechick · Jul 09, 2006, 08:28 PM

very nice hun, i like it even more wen you read it over the phone and added emphasis, i wuv ur voice!!
*kiss*

May_Bloodrose_Pagan · Mar 23, 2007, 04:11 PM

"As darkness falls, night unfolds ebon wings to wrap the world in its dark embrace"-Joeseph Vargo "Forever longing for an espace, only to get yelled at in my face, People are too complicated, love has become so over-rated, so I'm done and I'm gone"-Laren these are quotes that went through my head while I read your beautifully, well-thought out poem...sorry if I offend you by this comment, by the way

*Peach_follows* · Mar 23, 2007, 04:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by N.Y._Soulja

ain't no sunshine when its on,
cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
everytime, cuz we don't play.
and in the end
we all die one day

was this inspired at all by the song "aint no sunshine"? These last few lines remind me of the song.

JefferyXie · Mar 23, 2007, 04:41 PM

It sounds like a song i have heard before.Using the word sunshine to create a darkness mood is great and it flows well.Keep up the good effort.

*Rave_Grip* · Mar 23, 2007, 05:37 PM

It's a song right? Still capitalization would work. Keep it up ^_^

elie26 · Mar 23, 2007, 07:20 PM

>.> Who you?

Jkin, Anyways I really like this piece ^^ Very true words, harsh as it is, fav part was this-

Quote:

Ain't no sunshine in there its on...
only darkness everyday
ain't no sunshine when its on,
cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone
everytime, cuz we don't play.
and in the end
we all die one day

especially the last line, nicely done!

*Kasai* · Mar 23, 2007, 09:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rave_Grip

It's a song right? Still capitalization would work. Keep it up ^_^

What I always tell you, gringo? You better get your captialization and punctuation straight.

!The White Wolf · Mar 25, 2007, 10:09 PM

Nice poem, Soulja. Punctuation and capitalization would be very much appreciated, sorry. Lol, Kasai. Haha.

Jul 09, 2006, 03:08 AM	#1 (permalink)
N.Y._Soulja ¥_Gankutsuou_¥ Join Date: May 2005 Location: ¿Geez, where the hell am I? Posts: 600 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 326	No Sunshine There ain't no sunshine left you walk around, watching your every step hoping and praying you don't get checked yea this is life avoiding getting robbed, or mobbed while walking down the street so you go and get some heat and its layin in your pocket, and you can hear your heart beat and its stil in your pocket then he comes to you and you cock it pop it die B!tch die! he won't rob you anymore in your bed you lay you don't even snore you sit there remembering that day you killed a man in fear, of getting robbed and shot but that's life better you than him right? and so..... Ain't much more sunshine whilel you sittin in the floor wastin away and dyin Ain't no sunshine in there its on... only darkness everyday ain't no sunshine when its on, cuz when its on ya'll people wanna be gone everytime, cuz we don't play. and in the end we all die one day __________________ Death Is Certain; Its Hour Uncertain There Is No Need For Redemption
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ketaro Its Over 9000! Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,247 Thanks: 27 Thanked 34 Times in 32 Posts Credits: 24,435	Re: No Sunshine nice one brother, it looks like you have been doing your homework! keep it up man.
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animechick is backkk Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: texas Posts: 799 Thanks: 3 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 2,232	Re: No Sunshine very nice hun, i like it even more wen you read it over the phone and added emphasis, i wuv ur voice!! kiss __________________ sig by SasuraiHell [[*she wanted to be a dancer, now all she wants is to be with you*]] www.myspace.com/mourningtonight
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May_Bloodrose_Pagan Newbie Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Dearborn Heights, Michagan Posts: 66 Thanks: 3 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Credits: 1,676	Re: No Sunshine "As darkness falls, night unfolds ebon wings to wrap the world in its dark embrace"-Joeseph Vargo "Forever longing for an espace, only to get yelled at in my face, People are too complicated, love has become so over-rated, so I'm done and I'm gone"-Laren these are quotes that went through my head while I read your beautifully, well-thought out poem...sorry if I offend you by this comment, by the way __________________ Very Deeply Misunderstood
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JefferyXie Shichibukai Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 613 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 310	Re: No Sunshine It sounds like a song i have heard before.Using the word sunshine to create a darkness mood is great and it flows well.Keep up the good effort.
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Mar 23, 2007, 05:37 PM	#7 (permalink)
Rave_Grip I hate idiots on AO. Kill Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,337 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 16,710	Re: No Sunshine It's a song right? Still capitalization would work. Keep it up ^_^ __________________ I tried. \| .:~My AO Gallery~:. \| \| .:~The AO Rules~:. \|
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!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: No Sunshine Nice poem, Soulja. Punctuation and capitalization would be very much appreciated, sorry. Lol, Kasai. Haha.
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