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    My life is so boring, my life is so dull
    No excitement, no craze, no hint of a pull

    I need something, someone to come along
    A sweet someone special to sing me a song

    Just a thought of that life makes me dizzy
    Adventure and fun, my heart’s in a tizzy

    These white-washed walls disillusion my soul
    Life’s grueling routine has taken her toll

    But hey, who’s to blame everything is flawed
    Too bad though, my dream ain’t no fraud

    I’ve still got my tiny little hope
    Until then though, I’ll just have to cope

    But my heart skips a beat
    When I think of my special someone I’ve yet to meet

    So now take a hike, go away, and let me be
    I want to be alone again, just my mind and me

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    Just a little something I wrote to try and help me out of my writers block... as you can see.. it failed.
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: No title

    I like the rhyming. However, the wording of the first stanza is completely boring.
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    Re: No title

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    I like the rhyming. However, the wording of the first stanza is completely boring.
    I agree but then again if you read it you'll see the first stanza is just a reflection of the author's boring life. All in all it's not that bad.

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    Re: No title

    Nice rhyming, the first stanza is pretty kool. It gives a sense of emoness.

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