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    Days end at dawn
    Tommorrow is another one
    People sleeping at night
    But, during the day they are having fun

    Night time is when they are tired
    Family going to the park
    Couples sleeping in a bed
    Lights out at dark

    Days go by fast
    Night time is slow
    Time won't last
    Minutes go by flow


    haha I just thought it out, sounds cheesy, so please tell me what you think. T_T

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    ok... I like it though I don't quite understand the meaning. Your rhyming seems a bit forced too.

    But I like the theme of the dark. I went through a stage where all I would write about was night time. I'm actually working on one now. Can't wait to read more. ^_^

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    Nice poem, hellknight! I especially like this part:

    Days go by fast
    Night time is slow
    Time won't last
    Minutes go by flow
    So true. Time goes by very quickly, almost too quick, so we have to cherish every minute we have. Good job at a quick poem. I ejoyed it ^ ^

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    it doesn't sound cheesy. I pictured my day when its day time and how the world would look if all the lights went out. At night it feels like time do seem to slow down preparing for another day.

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