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*hellknight* · Jul 31, 2007, 12:41 AM

Each day I see
The world ahead of me
When I climb so high
And I like what I see

Am in love with the sad world
I just wanna shout
Because this place
It's something going in and out

The people that go by me
I see only their fate
Only anger and madness
It's something they hate

I think this is good but I don't know, what do you guys think?

*Lasura* · Jul 31, 2007, 07:52 AM

Well... this is ok, but I've seen better from you...

I like the fact that you're writing about the people of today- it's nice to read somthing that is not about love and relationships time to time...

Maybe this poem doesn't need a title- because it's so short- the poem can only speak for itself...

Anyways, I'll be waiting forward for more! ^^

!levitatinganimelover · Jul 31, 2007, 09:31 AM

dude you can do so much better your the one who inspired me to write poems but its still good

Jul 31, 2007, 12:41 AM	#1 (permalink)
hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Somewhere in SD. Posts: 1,598 Thanks: 7 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 24,274	no title Each day I see The world ahead of me When I climb so high And I like what I see Am in love with the sad world I just wanna shout Because this place It's something going in and out The people that go by me I see only their fate Only anger and madness It's something they hate I think this is good but I don't know, what do you guys think?
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Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,872 Thanks: 56 Thanked 34 Times in 31 Posts Credits: 49,619	Re: no title Well... this is ok, but I've seen better from you... I like the fact that you're writing about the people of today- it's nice to read somthing that is not about love and relationships time to time... Maybe this poem doesn't need a title- because it's so short- the poem can only speak for itself... Anyways, I'll be waiting forward for more! ^^ __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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