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    I look into my own eyes.
    The mirror reflecting my soul,
    as I gaze deeply,
    into the doorway to me.

    I see past my green ring,
    and into the blackness,
    of the pupil,
    that holds my being.

    I see nothing....
    not me...
    not the one I'm seeking...
    and not who I use to be.

    I simply see the eyes,
    of a man...
    broken and alone,
    who has had everything taken away.

    I don't look into eyes anymore.
    I'm afraid I'll see,
    something that I don't have,
    or that I want that I can't get.

    My biggest fear...
    is the fear of losing her.
    or the fear...
    that she is already lost.


    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    hmm... this is a speech from someone who has lost something and hoped he will not lose another... right?

    A very well written poem..the flow was very nice... ^^ and the mood fits well with the poem.. keep it up ^^

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    Hmmm... I like this poem very much ^^ It just made my hear beat faster. Very sad and very scary for me.... I think you' ve done a great work, it has a nice rythm and it is quite simple.

    At first I had problems understanding what are you sayig but it got clear at about the third stranza, it felt a bit odd, but maybe it's only good because it made me get deeper into the poem and search for all meanings.

    Anyways nice poem, I enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more ^^

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    aww the feeling of blaming yourself for lose of someone close to you is very hard to deal with. Its one thing that I can relate to and also fear losing someone close to me.

    It really was well written and it flowed really well. I was able to feel what you were feeling as I read it. I loved the last two stanza's especially as they really captured the feeling of the poem rather well as well as ending the poem in such a good way.

    It really was a great poem and I hope to see more to come
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