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Nov 07, 2007, 08:12 PM
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 Credits: 3,439 | no title I look into my own eyes. The mirror reflecting my soul, as I gaze deeply, into the doorway to me. I see past my green ring, and into the blackness, of the pupil, that holds my being. I see nothing.... not me... not the one I'm seeking... and not who I use to be. I simply see the eyes, of a man... broken and alone, who has had everything taken away. I don't look into eyes anymore. I'm afraid I'll see, something that I don't have, or that I want that I can't get. My biggest fear... is the fear of losing her. or the fear... that she is already lost. ......
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Nov 07, 2007, 08:59 PM
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  1 )3^^( )N  Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better...
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Credits: 59,502 | Re: no title hmm... this is a speech from someone who has lost something and hoped he will not lose another... right? A very well written poem..the flow was very nice... ^^ and the mood fits well with the poem.. keep it up ^^ |
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Nov 12, 2007, 03:58 AM
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| Angelic  Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms
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Credits: 49,619 | Re: no title Hmmm... I like this poem very much ^^ It just made my hear beat faster. Very sad and very scary for me.... I think you' ve done a great work, it has a nice rythm and it is quite simple. At first I had problems understanding what are you sayig but it got clear at about the third stranza, it felt a bit odd, but maybe it's only good because it made me get deeper into the poem and search for all meanings. Anyways nice poem, I enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more ^^ |
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Nov 14, 2007, 09:11 AM
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Credits: 34,739 | Re: no title aww the feeling of blaming yourself for lose of someone close to you is very hard to deal with. Its one thing that I can relate to and also fear losing someone close to me. It really was well written and it flowed really well. I was able to feel what you were feeling as I read it. I loved the last two stanza's especially as they really captured the feeling of the poem rather well as well as ending the poem in such a good way. It really was a great poem and I hope to see more to come 
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