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    No title yet.

    Burn your bridges,
    Cut your ties,
    And continue to live,
    All your pretty lies.

    Hurry quick,
    Run and hide.
    Before they get a glimpse,
    At what's deep inside.

    Let jerks be jerks,
    And sleeping dogs lie,
    Despite how bad it hurts.
    Or makes you want to die.

    Swallow it down,
    Till it makes you sick.
    Found bloody in pieces,
    At the end of this flick.
    ================
    Feel free to suggest a title.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: No title yet.

    This is really good and I like it.. although i can't figure out a title for it... maybe.. end? or something like that? It's hard to think of a title for it..

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    Re: No title yet.

    agreed with jamie..the title is hard to give... hmm...

    A very good poem the flow was amazing ~ ^^ and the rhyming scheme is good very nice ^^

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    Re: No title yet.

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    Burn your bridges,
    Cut your ties,
    And continue to live,
    All your pretty lies.

    Hurry quick,
    Run and hide.
    Before they get a glimpse,
    At what's deep inside.

    Let jerks be jerks,
    And sleeping dogs lie,
    Despite how bad it hurts.
    Or makes you want to die.

    Swallow it down,
    Till it makes you sick.
    Found bloody in pieces,
    At the end of this flick.
    ================
    Feel free to suggest a title.
    you should title it either deal with it
    or stop because it seems like ur saying stop complaining in a way
    wait
    "don't look back" it should be

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    Re: No title yet.

    Those are all really....relevent suggestions I'll think about them. Thank you.
    I'm glad you all like this so much. I'm kinda proud.

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    Re: No title yet.

    OOH! I like this one! You've gotten better with your rhymes! ^_^
    Congrats and mad props! This is one of my favs by you! (on AO at least. your private works are always my favorites)


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    I can imagine. Just can't bring myself to post the really personal stuff though. I can't handle having things like that shoved in my face. Thanks an' I'm glad you like it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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