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Oct 20, 2007, 11:22 AM
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 Sugar sweet poison  Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota.
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 Credits: 12,880 | No title yet. Burn your bridges, Cut your ties, And continue to live, All your pretty lies. Hurry quick, Run and hide. Before they get a glimpse, At what's deep inside. Let jerks be jerks, And sleeping dogs lie, Despite how bad it hurts. Or makes you want to die. Swallow it down, Till it makes you sick. Found bloody in pieces, At the end of this flick. ================ Feel free to suggest a title.
__________________ She's always trying not to cry. But I can see the demons in her eyes. She's always trying not to yell. But you see to her, she's trapped in hell. |
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Oct 20, 2007, 11:32 AM
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Credits: 6,221 | Re: No title yet. This is really good and I like it.. although i can't figure out a title for it... maybe.. end? or something like that? It's hard to think of a title for it.. |
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Oct 20, 2007, 01:06 PM
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  1 )3^^( )N  Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better...
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Credits: 59,502 | Re: No title yet. agreed with jamie..the title is hard to give...  hmm...A very good poem  the flow was amazing ~ ^^ and the rhyming scheme is good very nice ^^ |
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Oct 20, 2007, 01:13 PM
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 Otaku  | Re: No title yet. Quote:
or stop because it seems like ur saying stop complaining in a way wait "don't look back" it should be | |
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Oct 20, 2007, 01:26 PM
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| Sugar sweet poison Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota.
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Credits: 12,880 | Re: No title yet. Those are all really....relevent suggestions I'll think about them. Thank you. I'm glad you all like this so much. I'm kinda proud.
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Oct 22, 2007, 10:39 AM
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| Verbal Vandal  Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Minneapolis, MN
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Credits: 125,184 | Re: No title yet. OOH! I like this one! You've gotten better with your rhymes! ^_^ Congrats and mad props! This is one of my favs by you! (on AO at least. your private works are always my favorites) |
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Oct 22, 2007, 10:40 AM
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| Sugar sweet poison Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota.
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Credits: 12,880 | Re: No title yet. I can imagine. Just can't bring myself to post the really personal stuff though. I can't handle having things like that shoved in my face. Thanks an' I'm glad you like it.
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