wow..I am very impressed with this poem..
the transition and the vocab are excellent and I like how the title fits with the words and that you did not side-track from them.
very nicely done...I give you 10/10 for my rating ^^
I’m an ordinary boy,
With no exceptional capabilities,
Perhaps a few talents;
But that’s about it.
I have a realistic view about the world,
With my intuition being very clear,
My morals and my wisdom
Are what make me different from the rest
I am unsure of the way I am now;
I don’t know which decision is better-
Having a unique wisdom, gained by subsequent anguish
Or
A life with no knowledge if the real world
I used to pride myself on that
And now look at me
My dignity,
My mind, my heart,
My consciousness;
And my entire sense of self being
Are nomenclatures of recurring failures,
Emotional meltdowns,
Broken trust,
Uncertainty overshadows that feeling of exultancy
You know, “love”
Maybe, just maybe
If I was well aware of that enigmatic girl
The one who caused me to be partially insane
To be honest
I still would’ve loved to have her in my life
Even if I stand under the cold rain
Tears undistinguished from the water
Being so alone and wretched
I still, still,
Would’ve reached out to her, gave her back her consciousness
Perhaps slap her back to her senses
But like always,
I realise too late
The fact that she is a manipulator, an improbable person
Well, this pretty much captures my heart’s impression
This ain’t too good of a poem,
But I guess I won’t have to cry after this …
I’m an ordinary boy,
With no exceptional capabilities,
Perhaps a few talents;
But that’s about it.
wow..I am very impressed with this poem..
the transition and the vocab are excellent and I like how the title fits with the words and that you did not side-track from them.
very nicely done...I give you 10/10 for my rating ^^
DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
Yeah, I worked very hard on it, and it's still my first draft. Thank you.
you should definately keep writing, I love your work, it's beautiful and it hits "home" to me, I can relate in more ways than I'm willing to talk about...but it's like you've known...and wrote about it...
Very Deeply Misunderstood
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