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    Nomenclatures

    I’m an ordinary boy,
    With no exceptional capabilities,
    Perhaps a few talents;
    But that’s about it.

    I have a realistic view about the world,
    With my intuition being very clear,
    My morals and my wisdom
    Are what make me different from the rest

    I am unsure of the way I am now;
    I don’t know which decision is better-
    Having a unique wisdom, gained by subsequent anguish

    Or

    A life with no knowledge if the real world

    I used to pride myself on that
    And now look at me
    My dignity,
    My mind, my heart,
    My consciousness;
    And my entire sense of self being

    Are nomenclatures of recurring failures,
    Emotional meltdowns,
    Broken trust,
    Uncertainty overshadows that feeling of exultancy
    You know, “love”

    Maybe, just maybe
    If I was well aware of that enigmatic girl
    The one who caused me to be partially insane
    To be honest

    I still would’ve loved to have her in my life
    Even if I stand under the cold rain
    Tears undistinguished from the water
    Being so alone and wretched

    I still, still,
    Would’ve reached out to her, gave her back her consciousness
    Perhaps slap her back to her senses

    But like always,
    I realise too late
    The fact that she is a manipulator, an improbable person

    Well, this pretty much captures my heart’s impression
    This ain’t too good of a poem,
    But I guess I won’t have to cry after this …

    I’m an ordinary boy,
    With no exceptional capabilities,
    Perhaps a few talents;
    But that’s about it.

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    Re: Nomenclatures

    wow..I am very impressed with this poem..
    the transition and the vocab are excellent and I like how the title fits with the words and that you did not side-track from them.
    very nicely done...I give you 10/10 for my rating ^^
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    Re: Nomenclatures

    Yeah, I worked very hard on it, and it's still my first draft. Thank you.

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    Re: Nomenclatures

    you should definately keep writing, I love your work, it's beautiful and it hits "home" to me, I can relate in more ways than I'm willing to talk about...but it's like you've known...and wrote about it...

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