solking

its only been 5 days since i met you
but it feels like a lifetime i've known you
i can't stop thinkin about how i wanna hold you
take you to bed and start to control you

only seen pics of you and i can imagine
you laying beside me when i sleep
got my head all screwed up
when our conversations so deep

and i know i can't be in love
but your like angel sent from above
and i'm the devil in the flesh
reaper of souls, bringer of death

my broken heart belongs to a girl
and my broken soul another
and shattered spirit... still another
and yet none of them compare to what i see in you

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Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me

Powerful poem!

Seemed more like a rap ^^;;

The rhyming worked well, but was over used..

It seemed very lustful hehe but maybe you could of used better wording?

I really liked this poem though, it expressed how you feel clearly! Nice work!

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TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

Reaper66

and i know i can't be in love
but your like angel sent from above
and i'm the devil in the flesh
reaper of souls, bringer of death
^^^^^AWESOME
cool poem like ^he^ said its like a rap but thats what rap is right a poem(basically)
well thats what it used to be hate rap but good poem ^__^

let me now if you don't mind I want to quote you in my sig.^___^ I'll make sure people know who wrote it

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kakashi_sensei

hey pretty cool poem. i like the first stanza!! good job.

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elie26

I agree with Kerry, coz the poems would sound better if it didn't rhymed so much...^^;;;;

The last stanza really captured me. It was really nice ^^
And another thing is that it DOES sound lustful....well, maybe that's what u wanted to potray ^^;;; Nice work

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Blade X

very nice solking, i didnt know u wrote poems....anyways i have to start writing some since i've bin lagging behind.....but i like ur poem on how it's like a love between an angle n devil

keep it up

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yuska

its relly not the types of poems i like but that one is good eney more?

animechick

babe you always have had something special. i lvoed the last stanza, talking about how pieces of you belong to different ppl. im in the same situation, so i offer no advice, or i would advise myself. deep feelings always came through in you.

>K<

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