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    not again...

    its only been 5 days since i met you
    but it feels like a lifetime i've known you
    i can't stop thinkin about how i wanna hold you
    take you to bed and start to control you

    only seen pics of you and i can imagine
    you laying beside me when i sleep
    got my head all screwed up
    when our conversations so deep

    and i know i can't be in love
    but your like angel sent from above
    and i'm the devil in the flesh
    reaper of souls, bringer of death

    my broken heart belongs to a girl
    and my broken soul another
    and shattered spirit... still another
    and yet none of them compare to what i see in you

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    Re: not again...

    Powerful poem!

    Seemed more like a rap ^^;;

    The rhyming worked well, but was over used..

    It seemed very lustful hehe but maybe you could of used better wording?

    I really liked this poem though, it expressed how you feel clearly! Nice work!

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: not again...

    and i know i can't be in love
    but your like angel sent from above
    and i'm the devil in the flesh
    reaper of souls, bringer of death
    ^^^^^AWESOME
    cool poem like ^he^ said its like a rap but thats what rap is right a poem(basically)
    well thats what it used to be hate rap but good poem ^__^

    let me now if you don't mind I want to quote you in my sig.^___^ I'll make sure people know who wrote it
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    Re: not again...

    hey pretty cool poem. i like the first stanza!! good job.

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    Re: not again...

    I agree with Kerry, coz the poems would sound better if it didn't rhymed so much...^^;;;;

    The last stanza really captured me. It was really nice ^^
    And another thing is that it DOES sound lustful....well, maybe that's what u wanted to potray ^^;;; Nice work

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    Re: not again...

    very nice solking, i didnt know u wrote poems....anyways i have to start writing some since i've bin lagging behind.....but i like ur poem on how it's like a love between an angle n devil

    keep it up

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: not again...

    its relly not the types of poems i like but that one is good eney more?

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    Re: not again...

    babe you always have had something special. i lvoed the last stanza, talking about how pieces of you belong to different ppl. im in the same situation, so i offer no advice, or i would advise myself. deep feelings always came through in you.

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