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    Exclamation Not that far away, for now

    It's not so pleasent being alone.
    No one ever knew, how lost I felt.
    Or even how alone I was.
    I hate to sound harsh, but that's just me.
    It was hard to find words to speak of you.
    I watched you from afar without your knowledge.
    I watched your poster, your movements.
    Did you know I exsisted?
    Please don't leave, what will I watch?
    Your pulling my own trigger and this is screaming distraction.

    You made me sweat.
    I think of what you did and I secretly loved it.
    Dancing between boys and girls; where were you when my shock set in?
    Left in the distance you wondered.
    Left alone as I was.
    I'm seated and i'm sweating, help me out.
    I'm exactly where you like me you know, but I can't seem to find you.
    I'm afraid that I never evn had you in my grasp.

    You weren't even unappealing.
    What a wonderful character of intimacy you were.
    The virgin I was though, I stayed.
    Where were you, I still felt lost,
    Shame, that you felt the same.
    We could be so much more.

    Girls in whit dresses, boys in dark suits, but we were left out.
    We were making some progress when I found you by the door drifting away.
    You smelled of the plant and whiskey but still so beautiful you were.
    And I believ it was time for a new and proper introduction.
    You shall not stray away this time; I was desperate for attention.
    We are still young; dance you will with I.
    If you talk you better walk towards the dance floor.

    It's time for us to take a chance.
    Make a scene, make a scene.
    No one can proof a single word we said.
    You are only so clever to a certain extent.
    Finally near the end, stay with me.
    This was no accident, this was a certain wonderful chain of events.
    Together for now, untill, I stray away as you did.


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    Re: Not that far away, for now

    Bravo!!! ^^ Yet another awesome poet has entered the poetic grounds of AO. I am very much in awe with poem of yours!!! ^^ Brilliantly written, conveying a meaningful moment between two individuals. I myself have heard/written poems something similar to this one, yet yours is quite unique. You did a great job. Keep it up, and please share some more of your poems with us.

    -Kedar-

    EDIT: Had to do a minor correction to my post, so re-posted it. ^_^

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    Re: Not that far away, for now

    *claps* that was awesome gloomy, keep it up.

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    Re: Not that far away, for now

    *claps*3x
    More competition?

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