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    Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    Soul sick


    Maybe this homesick,
    Is more like longing,
    Maybe lonliness.
    Or better yet soul sick.

    From being away from creator,
    Or God if that's what you,
    Want to call it;
    For far to long.

    Or maybe it's just,
    A lost little girl.
    Who feel like,
    She has no home.

    Maybe it's because,
    She never was a kid.
    She never learned to trust,
    Not even herself.

    Maybe that's the reason why,
    Her body can't maintain life.
    Despite that being the one thing,
    In life that she ever Knew she wanted.

    ------------------------------------------
    Appointment anxiety.


    Her jaw is tence.
    She already knows;
    That they saw nothing.

    Her hearts already half broken,
    But beating rapid,
    Like her foot tapping.

    She already knows what he'll say.
    Just hold it inside,
    They don't need to see.

    Let them just think,
    I'm really that empty.

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    wow...they're really heart depressing,,,You're really good at writing poems...and i love the way it rhymes...now to think of it......it wanna read it again! keep up the good work!

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    :/ man.... u sure good in making sad poems.. ^^ it's very good both of em ^^ nicely done... keep up the good work I'll keep on reading ur poems..

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    Thank you both for your comments. Though I think I've decided the second one is unfiished I'm as "happy" as I can be at this point, with both.

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    Well, There are things in that first poem... that I always knew about you. Thats why I could more easily be friendly with you after all the bullshit between us. I knew... even though I hadn't given you a definative reason... that you didn't really trust my love for you. I knew that it wasn't your fault either.

    As for the second... That was an uncomfortable read. I felt your anxiety... even if only a small piece. Im sorry. So, so sorry.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    This is one of your lastes work(s) that I can honestly say that I feel your pain & it is hard to say that to a total stranger (I wouldn't even tell my closest friend)... Loneliness & emptiness two of lifes step sisters that hate each other, but loves to be with the a person at the same time... Keep up the good work even if it is difficult to see your true feelings on paper...

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    Re: Not a good morning. (A pair of poems)

    Thank you both. And thank you Peach for your support. Honestly.

    I meant to get to write on or rewrite the second one. But I havenn't yet been able to reread them even. At all. The wound is still so fresh and the physical pain is compounding the emotional and I really sincerely don't know how much more I can take. So I haven't written more like I've ment to. Just trying to hold on. Scared if I let it out, it won't stop. Like a hole in the damn that brings the whole thing down and floods the vally.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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