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    this is not a good poem

    Darkness of a heart,
    Darkness of a soul so alone,
    Darkness is around us.

    A heart once pure with light,
    A soul once was never alone,
    We had friends that never lie to us,
    But they lie for us to get us out of trouble.

    Dear brother you're an ass,
    And dear sister you're too easy,
    And me I'm just a loser,
    But I'm cool like that and don't care what people say.

    If people think different,
    Speak up or forever hold your peace.

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    Re: this is not a good poem

    I like your poem. For some reason I'm drawn to the dark poems but there may be a reason for that too. It is very well written. Keep up with the good work and I can't wait to read more from you.

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    Re: this is not a good poem

    ouch... thats wat ppl always say abt their bros.. XD

    This is a good poem..what u mean by not a good poem ^^ it's written nicely like my sis said up there..

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    Re: this is not a good poem

    i agree, it was very well written, the flow went accordingly throughout and yet it still kept to the beat of formality
    very good job, id like to hearmore

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