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    Not My Song

    Not My Song

    If that melody was meant for me,
    I'd play it over and over
    Every note
    would be a symphony
    I'd hold my breath at every break,
    and fall in love with every crescendo
    Every measure
    would scrawl itself across my heart
    and I'd sing in front of strangers
    no matter how many stares it brought

    If those words were written for me,
    I'd cherish every syllable
    Every letter
    would find its place
    I'd spell out the rest of our lives
    in the lines of a four minute song
    Every comma
    would seem to last a lifetime,
    and I'd worry over the periods
    as though they really meant the end

    If the croon of your voice was for me,
    I'd never turn my head away
    Every breath
    would whisper in my ear
    I'd keep my eyes on your lips
    to follow along with all you said
    Every gesture
    would catch my gaze
    and I'd remember every move you made
    on the day you finally sang for me

    If only that song was mine,
    I'd know that you were too
    But every part
    belongs to someone else
    So I'll keep singing to myself
    and hope that some day
    The song I sing
    is the one you wrote for me.
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    Re: Not My Song

    Wow.... I love it, it sounds amazing.... A really amazing poem with a good rythm.... I hope to see some more works from you

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    Re: Not My Song

    That was a beautiful poem gren...good job and keep up the good work, amazing work!

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    Re: Not My Song

    Wow great job. I feel what your saying, mabey a bit too much.haha Keep it up it gren your a natural at this.

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    Re: Not My Song

    Further proving why I think you’re the best poet on this site and one of my favorite poets’ altogether. I loved the concept and you used the elements of a song to beautifully sell it all. I was happy when I saw you had posted a poem earlier today and only regret not having been able to read it till now, 10's from me


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    Re: Not My Song

    WoW. My hand stayed rested over my chest and I could feel my pulse rate rise. This is the first time I've been teary eyed reading something, and not just based on emotions alone. This does carry a hopeful sadness. But, I was touched greatly by how beautifully it was written. You write with so much thought and passion.
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    Re: Not My Song

    Thanks all. This is a quite a bit more saccharine than my usual work, but the song that inspired it just brought out a side of me I didn't know existed. I must remember to suppress that side in the future.
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    Re: Not My Song

    Hmm.. @.@ this is good... my my... gotta agree with the rest... sheesh~ nicely done..captivating ^^ wanna see more of ur work ^^

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