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    Nothing, no more.

    I am nothing.
    No more.
    Just a bloodied
    Broken,
    Mass on the floor.

    Torn limbs.
    Ripped skin.
    Pulled hair.
    Life bairly there.

    Beaten and violated.
    Enraged by hatred
    As my heat stops
    Beating on the floor.

    Slowing up it makes me week
    To the point I can
    No longer speak.
    And hatred turns to sadness.

    Salty tears mingle in blood.
    This is my doing.
    My fault.
    I started this all.

    I did this to myself you see.
    Because I couldnt let anyone know me.
    And trust doesn't come easily.
    For wounded broken little girls.

    So leave me here upon the floor.
    Covered in the blood of you.
    Of me. Covered in tears
    Mingling with fears.

    Of what should have been.
    Hasty decisions
    They have a way
    Of neve leading no where.

    So here we find ourselves.
    Nothing.
    No more.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Nothing, no more.

    @.@ ooh.. the description nailed this poem nicely... the flow is good too...

    nicely done again

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    Re: Nothing, no more.

    Agreed with Rayme,

    Excellent flow, sad and depressed discription, awesome poem

    -Zainab

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    Re: Nothing, no more.

    I see you were rhyming on and off in this one. Maybe you weren't trying to, but... Yeah. I like it though. Only because I know you all too well, and I know how you feel/felt. This is good! Keep up the good work, hon! ^_^


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    Re: Nothing, no more.

    It's an amazing poem and I loved it. Its sad and everything.. *sighs* so sad.. but yet so good... I'd like to see more from you. ^-^

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