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Oct 19, 2007, 06:36 AM
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 Devoted Otaku  Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota.
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 Credits: 11,935 | Nothing, no more. I am nothing. No more. Just a bloodied Broken, Mass on the floor. Torn limbs. Ripped skin. Pulled hair. Life bairly there. Beaten and violated. Enraged by hatred As my heat stops Beating on the floor. Slowing up it makes me week To the point I can No longer speak. And hatred turns to sadness. Salty tears mingle in blood. This is my doing. My fault. I started this all. I did this to myself you see. Because I couldnt let anyone know me. And trust doesn't come easily. For wounded broken little girls. So leave me here upon the floor. Covered in the blood of you. Of me. Covered in tears Mingling with fears. Of what should have been. Hasty decisions They have a way Of neve leading no where. So here we find ourselves. Nothing. No more.
__________________ She's always trying not to cry. But I can see the demons in her eyes. She's always trying not to yell. But you see to her, she's trapped in hell. |
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Oct 21, 2007, 11:19 AM
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  1 )3^^( )N  Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better...
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Credits: 59,148 | Re: Nothing, no more. @.@ ooh.. the description nailed this poem nicely... the flow is good too... nicely done again  |
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Oct 21, 2007, 01:29 PM
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 Diamond in the Rough  Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: In a house. ._.
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Credits: 6,397 | Re: Nothing, no more. Agreed with Rayme, Excellent flow, sad and depressed discription, awesome poem  -Zainab
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Oct 22, 2007, 02:21 PM
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| CHUCK NORRIS!!!  Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Minneapolis, MN
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Credits: 110,749 | Re: Nothing, no more. I see you were rhyming on and off in this one. Maybe you weren't trying to, but... Yeah. I like it though. Only because I know you all too well, and I know how you feel/felt. This is good! Keep up the good work, hon! ^_^ |
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Oct 22, 2007, 02:57 PM
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| Banned  Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Lindsborg
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Credits: 6,221 | Re: Nothing, no more. It's an amazing poem and I loved it. Its sad and everything.. *sighs* so sad.. but yet so good... I'd like to see more from you. ^-^ |
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