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    observations

    Obervations.

    Alright looka here,
    you cry your self to sleep at night over a girl you met online

    And you,
    you have thoughts of commiting suicide.

    And you,
    you just plain crazy trying to be cool.

    I see observations all around me. from the emo to the lames to the crazy ING's.
    ya'll are cool and really fun to be around, but boy do you all have some things to work out.
    you got your crazy wanna be who think he cool
    you go tthe lame ass player trying to get all the girls maybe a hoe or two.
    you got your crazy emo who think the world is a crazy place!

    life is not hard, it's still simple. we are the ones who make it complicated.
    remember that my friends. If you want complicated, try calculus or writing a 12 page paper on cells.
    They aint interesting. you want a player, go play the damn Xbox!!
    you want a mac-daddy, go see daddy kane and talk to him.

    now if you want a duplicated, non originated, peice of work, go talk to ...well me!
    yea i have my moments, ican be bitchy
    but it's better than beng so damn scary.
    i say you all need to get your act right.
    stop trying to make this world less bright

    from breaking hearts to breaking your skin.
    is that the kind of life you want to live?

    yea this is some what a poem and some what a rant.
    but it's better than watching some lady on lifetime feed her damn plants.

    Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen

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    Re: observations

    Ooookay. Not a bad poem, capitalization would be better. I like the theme too. Nice rant job.

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    Re: observations

    hehehe, more like a commenting poem.. good tittle..
    nice vocabs, good job, good poem!

    If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
    I don't mind and you don't matter

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    <woot> Princess! Keep up the nice job! This a whole new style and I haven't really seen it that much here on AO! Oh and keep them coming! <woot!>

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    Re: observations

    I enjoy poems about observations..it is interesting to see the way other people view the world and it is great that the poem is fused with a rant.it feels like you are dancing.

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    Lol, this seems to link to the other poem you made. I love both of them. The rant sure worked! About ppl with online relationships and being all emo, and such. Great job. Again, spelling and capitalization goes a long way.

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    Re: observations

    thank you, i try to gve what people need.
    people by my house and people here inspired me.
    glad you all like it

    Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen

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