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    He admitted his actions had hurtful intent.
    And, she stood in his cruelty, as if her soul was melting.
    Then, all at once her thoughts slowly bent…
    It occurred to her that perhaps he was helping.

    Perhaps part of him can see through hatreds thickness.
    She was never in love. She was only in sickness.
    And he says his goal, was to make her pay…
    Do whatever it takes just to push her away.

    Her heart was spread thin before he ever got there.
    He never possessed it. He had only a spot there.
    But she found him so beautiful, gifted and kind.
    That instead of her heart… She gave him her mind.

    But she barely loved self, and through her depression.
    “Loving” him became quite the obsession.
    And soon obsession turned into devotion.
    He did not love her, but he went through the motions.

    Years have past, any love they shared… Died.
    But she can’t let go because she feels they are tied.
    But how can you love someone who won’t love you back?
    Love does not come from a story so black.

    He is left with no choice, now he must inflict pain.
    To cut them both free from the ties of the brain.
    He wanted to hurt her… at least that’s what he said.
    But maybe he just wants to get out of her head.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Obsession's Death

    Hmm... a lot of feeling...very sad... :/ u got this from experience? @.@

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    Oh my.. this was amazing... great wording.. Beautifully written.... I like this poem and I would like to see more from you... Keep up the great work^_^

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    Re: Obsession's Death

    hello your poem obsession's death had alot of feeling in it which made it a very good poem to read

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    Re: Obsession's Death

    hey verry good poem and I agree with leftinthedark because alot of emotion always gives a good poem great job keep it up.
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    Oh thank you all so much! I really needed feedback to this, as it was difficult for me write. I would have thanked you all sooner but my internet access is limited. I think I have a virus or something
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Obsession's Death

    this poem is really filled with desperate plea's of
    LET ME GO , everyone has come to the conclusion
    that he only stays or maybe its you that stays just
    to have some kind of reaction be it bad or good.

    hates bitter reaction makes the world and
    the ones you thought you loved seem right
    that's nothing but blind impulse that leads to
    bad things no matter how you try to make it
    seem all pretty and acceptable.

    this poem does ahow alot of pain but it also
    shows that moving on is best instead of letting
    things weigh you down like an anchor that drowns
    you , i love this poem alot.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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