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    That one day with you.

    I looked in your eyes, I saw a little shine
    Right at that moment, I knew your were mine.
    I Texted you, I couldn't let you go
    Lots of thank you and I love you notes.

    You were perfect, my shining prince
    The one I dreamed of, the one I would kiss.
    We arrived at your house, I asked why
    You said "Baby, relax...every thing's gonna be fine."

    We sat on your bed, watched some TV
    I felt a hand on my neck, You sat on your feet.
    My heart was beating, what do I do?
    Should I let you do this and go all the way with you?

    The next morning, I woke up with sweat.
    What had I done, am I really pregnant?
    I married my prince and had kids at 16.
    That just goes to show, make the right choices and follow your dreams...
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: That one day with you.

    that is a very nice poem.im not much of a romancer, but still, i like it

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    Re: That one day with you.

    Wow thats really good. It should remind young girls that just because you have that dream boy doesnt mean you should let him take over you and allow him to do whatever he wants to you. I think its the cutest thing ever it has just enough fantasy with a splash of a reality check. Keep on rocking with more poems!
    I wish a life of a love of a life. Send a light to through the darkest of nights. Let a kiss fly from the heart. Love me like you loved me in our past lives. Send this pain back to me these cold lonely nights. Haunt all my fanasties leave all my dreams shadow yourself once again into me....

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    Re: That one day with you.

    Thank you both. Well actually it's related to that, and so they wont be able to take advantage of people. Thank you both ^-^
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: That one day with you.

    i enjoyed the peom. it was beautifully written and sends an important message out to all the young girls out there to not taken advantage of. fight to the end.

    If this world is hell,
    then God is nicer than everyone thinks

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    Re: That one day with you.

    You were perfect, my shining prince
    The one I dreamed of, the one I would kiss.
    We arrived at your house, I asked why
    You said "Baby, relax...every thing's gonna be fine."
    i like this line since it was like yeah he was perfect for you but well you still had those doubts that he tried to re assure you. Princess this one is like one of my faves that you wrote. Made me feel all warm and fuzzy....
    "In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends."
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