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    The one everybody fears

    As tears fall a deep blood red I fall,
    broken and dead I'm calling out but no one hears me,
    and I can't run from my fear,
    demons beckon to me,
    they smile sweetly;they heard my call,
    promises whispered,
    they beg me to stay I try and try,
    but I can't pull away consumed by lies,
    by hatred,
    and fears now I am the one that everyone,
    fears....
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    Re: The one everybody fears

    Spelling, wording, and punctuation need to be worked on.
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    Re: The one everybody fears

    ok thanks for the advice^_^I'll work harder on my poems

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    Re: The one everybody fears

    they beg me to stay I try and try,
    but I can't pull away consumed by lies,
    by hatred,
    i like this part out of all of it because it says alot about
    how people respond when others try to help because the
    trust thats needed to help isnt there, sort of sad buts it true
    awesome poems cant wait to read another

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