for the one i love

crazy canadin emo kid · Jan 13, 2008, 09:35 AM

for the one i love
im hear for you

no matter what you say or do
im hear for you

even tho when i look apon
you i dont know what to do
give you a kiss or run
away from you

my mine is a mess
my life gives me no time to rest

but life has now given me
some one to hold on to something
worth liveing for something
life given to me for a reason
and i shall keep it close to me

evey time i talk to you
something in me sparks
makes me more alive

what is this thing is i dont
know and i dont care i wish
i can stay like this forever

and it can...just promiss
to stay with me forever

i give you my heart
without a seocond guess
caz i know you will keep
it with you

for the one i love.....
my love is what i offer

for the one i love......
i have my arms out
wateing for you to fall
into them

for the one i love
im with you allways one
step behind you wateing for
you when you are ready
to come with me

for the one i love....
im just leting you know.....
i love you....will you love me
crazy canadin emo kid
(i know is not relly a poem but this is the place to put it)

ryomakurosaki · Jan 13, 2008, 09:49 AM

Good things: A good poem it has alot of emotions pouring out of it. It has a some-what good flow. I could feel the emotions you put forth into this poem for the one you love.

The part I don't enjoy to much

Bad things: In your poem you seem to have alot of spelling mistakes. Always read over it like two times to make sure you spelled things right. In your poem you need puncutation. It seems like a run on sentence.

Well in my opinon I did enjoy the poem but it could use some improvements. Good job on this one and I hope to see more in the future.

crazy canadin emo kid · Jan 13, 2008, 09:53 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ryomakurosaki

Good things: A good poem it has alot of emotions pouring out of it. It has a some-what good flow. I could feel the emotions you put forth into this poem for the one you love.

The part I don't enjoy to much

Bad things: In your poem you seem to have alot of spelling mistakes. Always read over it like two times to make sure you spelled things right. In your poem you need puncutation. It seems like a run on sentence.

Well in my opinon I did enjoy the poem but it could use some improvements. Good job on this one and I hope to see more in the future.

i know i suck a spelling srooy about that and i put spaces betten it so it wont be run on sentes but thank for your comment thank you for likeing my work
*bows to you*

iluvmyloser · Jan 13, 2008, 12:14 PM

I like it^^ but just to let you know here=right here

hear=listen

overall it was a very sweet poem with good flow & structure^^

good work

SweetCandy · Jan 13, 2008, 12:52 PM

AAwww wow ..I didn't know you were poetic..that was beautiful..*pinches emo cheeck* That was really good..I use to write them..but I just talk to ppl now about how I feel or what i go through..it makes feel a lot better than just puttin it on paper..cuz now I have good friends..

But emo i would love to read some more...

crazy canadin emo kid · Jan 13, 2008, 01:20 PM

thanks iluvmyloser like ryomakurosaki saed im not a good speller
and thank you sweetcandy i will make some more poem later
thanks you all

jazzy9513 · Jan 13, 2008, 01:55 PM

awwwwwwwwww this is so sweet i love it and it is a poem

crazy canadin emo kid · Jan 13, 2008, 02:05 PM

thanks jazzy9513 im glad you like it it took 3 hours to make it
and it dose not have what i thought that makes it a poem
but it is i guess i shall make a new one soon

katsoyori33 · Jan 15, 2008, 09:31 PM

Nice job. You do need to improve on your spelling though. But over all its a really good poem. 2 thumbs up

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crazy canadin emo kid Otaku Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: in a place whare i cant see a place whare im dead and broken Posts: 383 Thanks: 1 Thanked 13 Times in 12 Posts Credits: 8,500	for the one i love for the one i love im hear for you no matter what you say or do im hear for you even tho when i look apon you i dont know what to do give you a kiss or run away from you my mine is a mess my life gives me no time to rest but life has now given me some one to hold on to something worth liveing for something life given to me for a reason and i shall keep it close to me evey time i talk to you something in me sparks makes me more alive what is this thing is i dont know and i dont care i wish i can stay like this forever and it can...just promiss to stay with me forever i give you my heart without a seocond guess caz i know you will keep it with you for the one i love..... my love is what i offer for the one i love...... i have my arms out wateing for you to fall into them for the one i love im with you allways one step behind you wateing for you when you are ready to come with me for the one i love.... im just leting you know..... i love you....will you love me crazy canadin emo kid (i know is not relly a poem but this is the place to put it) __________________ the one and only show that rocks my socks the one show that i cant live with out. soul society will live on forever in the minds of its poeple!!!
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ryomakurosaki Otaku Join Date: May 2007 Location: Where the angels play Posts: 270 Thanks: 17 Thanked 28 Times in 24 Posts Credits: 10,702	Re: for the one i love Good things: A good poem it has alot of emotions pouring out of it. It has a some-what good flow. I could feel the emotions you put forth into this poem for the one you love. The part I don't enjoy to much Bad things: In your poem you seem to have alot of spelling mistakes. Always read over it like two times to make sure you spelled things right. In your poem you need puncutation. It seems like a run on sentence. Well in my opinon I did enjoy the poem but it could use some improvements. Good job on this one and I hope to see more in the future. __________________ Can't believe I could think that he would just follow me everywhere I go I just wrestle with you in my dreams and wake up making love to my pillow Videos of the week(updated next on June 15):http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PjAsrwW9ptU
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jazzy9513 Otaku Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 109 Thanks: 0 Thanked 9 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 1,416	Re: for the one i love awwwwwwwwww this is so sweet i love it and it is a poem __________________ Kingdom Hearts rulz!!!!! Jazzy ^_^
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crazy canadin emo kid Otaku Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: in a place whare i cant see a place whare im dead and broken Posts: 383 Thanks: 1 Thanked 13 Times in 12 Posts Credits: 8,500	Re: for the one i love thanks jazzy9513 im glad you like it it took 3 hours to make it and it dose not have what i thought that makes it a poem but it is i guess i shall make a new one soon __________________ the one and only show that rocks my socks the one show that i cant live with out. soul society will live on forever in the minds of its poeple!!!
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katsoyori33 Otaku Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: The year 2552. On a planet called Reach. In a Spartan training facility... Posts: 144 Thanks: 12 Thanked 14 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 6,039	Re: for the one i love Nice job. You do need to improve on your spelling though. But over all its a really good poem. 2 thumbs up __________________ "Where can I buy a phone?" OMIGOSH!!! I've been here a whole year!!!!
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