Good things: A good poem it has alot of emotions pouring out of it. It has a some-what good flow. I could feel the emotions you put forth into this poem for the one you love.
The part I don't enjoy to much
Bad things: In your poem you seem to have alot of spelling mistakes. Always read over it like two times to make sure you spelled things right. In your poem you need puncutation. It seems like a run on sentence.
Well in my opinon I did enjoy the poem but it could use some improvements. Good job on this one and I hope to see more in the future.