One more time

One more time

You ask for forgiveness
You ask for mercy
You ask for all the things
You never gave me

So why should I care
Instead of making you suffer
Why shouldn't I watch
You bleed to death over there

What makes you think
That I care about you
What makes you think
That I could ever love you

Does it look like I love you
Do you mean some thing
No, you mean nothing
Nothing at all

So take your screams of pain
Your Please have mercys
All the way to hell
For your life was in vain

No one will save you
Not a single soul
For everyone hates you
No matter what you control

I'll finish it quick
I've had enough fun
All you have to do is scream out to me
One more time

my,.. @.@ i feel anger there...residing deep in the poem... i hope it's sealed @.@

nicely done... a very good poem indeed... nice flow and it end's nicely~! :D

:eek: nice...

I really like how I can read this nice and quickly, :2thumbs:
Really nice flow, Yeah...She does sound angry Rayme :laugh:

Hope to read more from you ^__^

-Zainab

It eems you have no way to go, and some one loves you but you dont love them back! You seem to be in s struggle, It just seems sad to me.. but great job on the poem can't wait till you make more!

OOH! ANGRY! ^_^

This is good, right here! Pure, raw, unadulterated emotion and power in this poem!
I like your ability to express your anger in this poem. Keep up the good work!

Thank you... All of you.. it means a lot that you guys like my pissed off poetry.. lol.... well i got to thinking about someone and yeah.. it just kinda went from there... *looks down* i don't usually write hate poems.. but.. it was something new and I guess it came out alright... usually they don't make sense..

wow angelic, I am sorry you feel that way anything your friends can do let us know! we will help (or try to) and try to get rid of that anger. it hurst not only you, but you know that.