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    One more time

    One more time

    You ask for forgiveness
    You ask for mercy
    You ask for all the things
    You never gave me

    So why should I care
    Instead of making you suffer
    Why shouldn't I watch
    You bleed to death over there

    What makes you think
    That I care about you
    What makes you think
    That I could ever love you

    Does it look like I love you
    Do you mean some thing
    No, you mean nothing
    Nothing at all

    So take your screams of pain
    Your Please have mercys
    All the way to hell
    For your life was in vain

    No one will save you
    Not a single soul
    For everyone hates you
    No matter what you control

    I'll finish it quick
    I've had enough fun
    All you have to do is scream out to me
    One more time

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    Re: One more time

    my,.. @.@ i feel anger there...residing deep in the poem... i hope it's sealed @.@

    nicely done... a very good poem indeed... nice flow and it end's nicely~!

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    nice...

    I really like how I can read this nice and quickly,
    Really nice flow, Yeah...She does sound angry Rayme

    Hope to read more from you ^__^

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    Re: One more time

    It eems you have no way to go, and some one loves you but you dont love them back! You seem to be in s struggle, It just seems sad to me.. but great job on the poem can't wait till you make more!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: One more time

    OOH! ANGRY! ^_^

    This is good, right here! Pure, raw, unadulterated emotion and power in this poem!
    I like your ability to express your anger in this poem. Keep up the good work!


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    Re: One more time

    Thank you... All of you.. it means a lot that you guys like my pissed off poetry.. lol.... well i got to thinking about someone and yeah.. it just kinda went from there... *looks down* i don't usually write hate poems.. but.. it was something new and I guess it came out alright... usually they don't make sense..

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    Re: One more time

    wow angelic, I am sorry you feel that way anything your friends can do let us know! we will help (or try to) and try to get rid of that anger. it hurst not only you, but you know that.
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