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    One in the same

    the things i say
    the things i do
    can never get me trough to you
    you the one that is me all
    the time me the one that stops to cry
    me the one that is always hurt
    me the one that is allways confused
    you the one that never has good news
    you the one that just sits there and cries
    me the one that doest care except to die
    me the one that wants to die
    me the one that wishes t could stop
    wishes it could day after day
    wishes it could stop is what i say

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    Slippery When Wet~ Trampoline Tricks 2 Champion, Togy Ball Champion highteckdudu is off to a good start highteckdudu's Avatar
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    Re: One in the same

    Your trying to get a message accross! Look at me stating the obviouse! *bows head* Well any way keep up the work! cant wait for more!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: One in the same

    good job with this piece
    i understard what are say very well
    hope to see more of your work

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    Re: One in the same

    Oh no, I can't take this.... *chuckles* Cute style, but- I see... If this is what you really felt, then, don't just get serious. Try to have fun, runbearer. I "feel" you *smile* .... Nice one -PEACE!-
    Carve an amble now,
    Saying that the day's still bright,
    And let's play with time.

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    Re: One in the same

    Nice effort. However, it is not really poem-like. Try to be more descriptive.

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    Re: One in the same

    yeah... it's aright... it could use some work though... It's not bad.. I kinda like it but.. i guess it's just not what i'm used to...

    I'd still like to hear some more from you. ^-^

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