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    One sided Love

    My tears,
    Drop on to your shirt,
    And all my words,
    Pour out my mouth,
    And on the pavement,
    You crush them.
    I smile,
    Because I know,
    Its something,
    You never meant.

    Those aches in my heart,
    Expands twice the size.
    I feel like,
    My insides are,
    Eroding fast,
    Because my love for you will,
    Certainly last.

    If only people choose to adopt me.... a lonely monkey

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    Re: One sided Love

    This makes me feel bad because I know I did this to someone but it wasn't intentional. It's simple decievingly so because the topic that it's dealing with is very complex.That is to say that I think that this one is good. I can't place it, but to me it still seems like it's lacking something. When I figure it out I'll pm you with it. Other then that, I like this one way more then the other.

    ... and join my rebellion against time.

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    Re: One sided Love

    I like this poem a but depressing but it is a good poem....I usually write stuff like this it is good to see someone else writing about it too...one question though because i write poems through what i feel...did this happen to you???

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    Re: One sided Love

    wow.......COOOOLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!! i love that poem!!!!

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    Re: One sided Love

    First of all, that was a great poem filled with emotions and a well usage of sentimental words. i liked the last stanza it sort of reminded me of the old naive me. Overall it was a great poem and i am looking forward to see more of your poems.

    Quote Originally Posted by Monkey View Post
    Those aches in my heart,
    Expands twice the size.
    I feel like,
    My insides are,
    Eroding fast,
    Because my love for you will,
    Certainly last.

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