My tears,
Drop on to your shirt,
And all my words,
Pour out my mouth,
And on the pavement,
You crush them.
I smile,
Because I know,
Its something,
You never meant.
Those aches in my heart,
Expands twice the size.
I feel like,
My insides are,
Eroding fast,
Because my love for you will,
Certainly last.
If only people choose to adopt me.... a lonely monkey
This makes me feel bad because I know I did this to someone but it wasn't intentional. It's simple decievingly so because the topic that it's dealing with is very complex.That is to say that I think that this one is good. I can't place it, but to me it still seems like it's lacking something. When I figure it out I'll pm you with it. Other then that, I like this one way more then the other.
... and join my rebellion against time.
I like this poem a but depressing but it is a good poem....I usually write stuff like this it is good to see someone else writing about it too...one question though because i write poems through what i feel...did this happen to you???
wow.......COOOOLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!! i love that poem!!!!
First of all, that was a great poem filled with emotions and a well usage of sentimental words. i liked the last stanza it sort of reminded me of the old naive me. Overall it was a great poem and i am looking forward to see more of your poems.
Originally Posted by Monkey
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