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    One Thousand

    A thousand tears
    I cannot hide
    Filled of sorrow
    And of pain

    A thousand marks
    For all to see
    How I feel
    For only you

    A thousand wounds
    I’ve had to bare
    By all mistakes
    I wish not to do

    A thousand frowns
    Not hidden
    From my rows
    I didn’t want

    A thousand looks
    Across the room
    Observing you
    Looking for reactions

    A thousand smiles
    Appear on my face
    In remembrance
    Of great times

    A thousand thoughts
    Arise inside
    Filled of doubt
    Hoping they will end

    A thousand wishes
    I have made
    For one day
    To be happy forever

    Again...a new poem i have just finished
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    Re: One Thousand

    Well, the first three verses in each stanza are beautiful. It's the last verse that makes the flow seem all wrong.
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    Re: One Thousand

    this is a very Beautifl poem, the senses the feelings ...very beautiful I tell You!! good one!!

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    Re: One Thousand

    hmph(concentrate)

    i must say that the poem is well written, not that long and has a lot of emotion...
    its cool.



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: One Thousand

    The poem was awesome! I think you more or less concentrated on getting the emotion into the poem to so that the reader could feel what your feeling! And the first three lines just come to life on there own! Very well written! Keep up the good work!

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