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Sep 11, 2006, 02:34 PM
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 Credits: 34,739 | One Thousand A thousand tears I cannot hide Filled of sorrow And of pain A thousand marks For all to see How I feel For only you A thousand wounds I’ve had to bare By all mistakes I wish not to do A thousand frowns Not hidden From my rows I didn’t want A thousand looks Across the room Observing you Looking for reactions A thousand smiles Appear on my face In remembrance Of great times A thousand thoughts Arise inside Filled of doubt Hoping they will end A thousand wishes I have made For one day To be happy forever Again...a new poem i have just finished
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Sep 11, 2006, 07:23 PM
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Credits: 1,616 | Re: One Thousand Well, the first three verses in each stanza are beautiful. It's the last verse that makes the flow seem all wrong.
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Sep 11, 2006, 08:56 PM
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Credits: 409 | Re: One Thousand hmph(concentrate) i must say that the poem is well written, not that long and has a lot of emotion... its cool.
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Sep 11, 2006, 10:26 PM
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Credits: 1,286 | Re: One Thousand The poem was awesome! I think you more or less concentrated on getting the emotion into the poem to so that the reader could feel what your feeling! And the first three lines just come to life on there own! Very well written! Keep up the good work! BlueFox1 |
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...very beautiful I tell You!!
good one!!
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