In this poem you repeat a 2 lines twice. It's a good line but shouldn't be repeated. Other then that it was a good poem. There are so many relationships that are this way in reality and it's amazing how a anime series kinda portraies reality but in a dfferent way. The way you took this poem was cool and maybe you could have went alittle more into details with it. Not telling you how to write but I'm just giving some tips.