This is a short poem I wrote about 10 minutes ago, taken in Kikyou's view talking about her and inuyasha. please let me know what you think. THx.
Only in my dreams....
Only in my dreams, can I be with you,
But I know deep inside that you want that too.
We only knew each other, but for a few days,
But then we went our seperate ways.
All the time I wish I was here with you,
And I know for certain, you want that too.
So leave the girl that looks like me,
Then come on back and you will see,
That no one else resembles me...
For I am yours, and you are mine,
All for everlasting time.
So I will wait, wait for that day,
When you'll be back with me to play.
Only in my dreams, can we be together,
I know one day... that dreams come true.
I know I'm not a very good writer. But I think it was good, and I hope that you do too.
In this poem you repeat a 2 lines twice. It's a good line but shouldn't be repeated. Other then that it was a good poem. There are so many relationships that are this way in reality and it's amazing how a anime series kinda portraies reality but in a dfferent way. The way you took this poem was cool and maybe you could have went alittle more into details with it. Not telling you how to write but I'm just giving some tips.
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