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    open to a new world

    Open to a new world
    Blushing and grinning from ear to ear.
    Laughing for all to hear.
    While fullilling our dreams,
    as we hold each other near.

    Two hearts once was seperated,
    now combinded to create a whole .
    With the doors now open,
    we step through with a long journey finally completed.

    Soring through the air with nothing to fear.
    Our love pure as light for all to see,
    as it's been guided by star.
    Though the darkest shodow of the night.

    Were one was empty,
    the void has now been filled.
    With the light of new day,
    and the dawn of new world.


    this was written myself and ichgo_06
    thanks
    and i you all enjoy this peace
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    Re: open to a new world

    hey you know my appinion on this alreay but just thought I would say here, verry good, (even though we wrote it together) lol good job keep it up.
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    Re: open to a new world

    Beautiful!!!!!
    Very poetic words that are full of meaning!!!!
    Great job!!!
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    Re: open to a new world

    thank for both of comments
    and i will do the best that can
    thanks again to all

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    one word....


    PERFECTO,,,kk it was awsome, very romantic indead
    i wonder..............
    ^__^ keep up the good work

    -zainab

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    Re: open to a new world

    i liked it, you should work on the grammar a little but it was very beautiful. it really did have a lot of emotion in it. it translated out from you poem, something that is hard to do. well i liked it.
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    Re: open to a new world

    some spelling mistakes.. but the poem overall was good ^^ u need to work on em spellings..

    Nice.. ^^ keep up the good work

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    Re: open to a new world

    thanks for all of your feed back
    and happy you all like .
    and i will work grammer as well
    thanks again for the comments

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