Well I used to know someone fair
She had orange ribbons in her hair
She was such a trip
She was hardly there
But I loved her
Just the same.
There was rain in our window,
The FM set was ragged
But she could talk, yeah,
We learned to speak
And one year
Has gone by
Such a long long road to seek it
All we did was break and freak it
We had all
That lovers ever had
We just blew it
And I'm not sad
Well I'm mad
And I'm bad
And two years
Have gone by
Now her world was bright orange
And the fire glowed
And her friend had a baby
And she lived with us
Yeah, we broke through the window
Yeah, we knocked on the door
Her phone would not answer,
Yeah, but she's still home
Now her father has passed over
And her sister is a star
And her mother smokes diamonds
And she sleeps out in the car
Yeah, but she remembers Chicago
The musicians & guitars
And grass by the lake
And people who laugh'd
And made her poor heart ache
Now we live down in the valley
We work out on the farm
We climb up to the mountains
And everything's fine
And I'm still here
And you're still there
And we're still around
Oh my god... this is sucha great poem-story!!!!!!!!! Wonderfull!!!! So lovely, it made me all dreamy and in love (eee... don't ask with whom, I haven't got the slightest idea...)!!!! great work!!!! Truly magnificent!!!!!! I love it... simply love it!
Made me think, made me smile and made me sad... great work... ^^ I love it! Love it! Love it! *jumps around* ^^ one of my favourites from now on...
I'll be waiting for more!!! *grabs the poem and runs off*
Originally Posted by Lasura
Maybe u should try searching this poetry part of forum for my other songs,,,just do advanced search with mu nickname and there u'll have more of me
Oh so... you have more here? nice... sorry... I'm quite new that's why I don't know, this is the first poem I read by you, I'm almost sure of that ^^ I haven't read all the poems that were here before I came... ^^ I'll do it now then ^^ thanks
Hm,u have something about 988 post and i've got only 27 which makes u older than me
aha... I hope you feel ashamed and will post more ^^ jk I understand... almost
Now, ok, sorry if this is against some rules, but, since all the threds of his previous poems are closed but I want to coment on some of them soooo much, I'll do it here, k? ^^
Speech...
I have no idea how it is to feel like that- I never had, I've always found something good in bad and always looked forward in life with hope, with a confidence that "everything can get only better now" (if I'm in deep sh*t), so I must say this poem brought something new in me, you've manged to describe your feelings well enough...
Glass Heart
I loved this line: "Sometimes you want me when I hate your touch"
I can just imagine that...
and the mood altogether... well it's good created, because it def. made me feel somthing... it brought back bad memmories...
Frozen Heart
WOW!!! I really must say this one is great!!! Wonderful work with the descriptions and I could really feel that the lyrical "me" cares much about this girl. It also reminded me of a story that I wrote a long time ago and I think this was just the push I needed to continue with it... Great work! I must really thank you for this one!
I don't mind
Something alike what I could write... only mine would be shorter and not as hounting...
This one really took me away and brought me to another world... nice work with that!!! I read it holding my breat... it's great!!! nice work!
Wonderland
Just the poem I needed... somewhat a week ago... it's great... talks about someone like me... that's why I love it so much... nice adapation of wonderland
I really like the way you write! And will be waiting for more...
AWESOME!!!!!!!!! I love this poem!!!!!! It's just so amazing and it just seems so perfect really!!!!!!!!!! This poem is just so ..... I can't find any great words to describe it but it's just fantastic!!!!!!! I hope to see more!!!!
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
OMG!!!!love this poem its so...so..i cant even think of words right now keep it ↑ sad though almost made mebut i love it so emtional and powerfull meanings great work.*runs after lasura*wait i want it!!*jumps up and down *great work on this though*runs off*
♥~*The Princess*~♥
Yeah, Bye.
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