Ahhh... that was a nice poem. I don't think at all it was hard to understand, I really think it just made ihunt too emotional... poor Zainab @.@ *hugs Zainab*
I really liked it... it was nice to read. Didn't notice any big flaws... though it is quite simple and what Ray suggested might help with that, but those things are sadly things that come with time ^^
Hmm... oh I wanted to talk about the idea of the poem... it is very nice... and true... But there is also another "other side of love"- you don't have to part to feel it. When you are with someone- you get ups and downs all the time, tears and laughter... but it's just the other part of love and... well I enjoy it just as much as the good part...
Nice work Ryoma! ^^ I missed your writting and I hope to see more ^^