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    Thumbs up Our love (Poem)

    you chew me up
    and spit me out
    enjoy the taste
    ill leave in your mouth
    you look at me
    i look at you
    neither of us know what to do
    there mightt not
    be another way to your heart
    so i guess i'd better find a new way in
    i shiver when i hear your name
    think about you but its not the same
    i wont be satisfued until im under your skin
    immobilized by the thought of you
    paraliyzed by the sight of you
    beauty is what the eye beholds
    so come to bed its getting late
    theres no more time for us to waste
    remeber how my body tastes
    you feel your heart once again being to race
    handsome
    tender
    soft
    why do you look right through me
    thinking
    "NO"
    i cant deny my feelings
    growing strong
    i try to keep on believeing
    dreaming on
    and every time i see you
    i crave more
    i wanna pull you closer
    but you leave me feeling frozen
    i can be
    all you need
    wont you please
    stay with me
    apologies, might have been
    cant erase what i feel
    choking
    back emotion
    i try to keep on hoping
    for a way
    a reason for both of us to
    come in
    close
    i long for you to hold me
    and though my dream is
    slowly fading
    i wanna be the object
    of your passion but its hopeless
    If you chose to..
    walk away..
    id still be,
    right here waiting

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    Re: Our love (Poem)

    Wow,
    You poem brings up deep emotions. I think it could use a little work.
    Like the spelling and some of the grammer. But after reading your poem.
    Makes me want to have want you want. I kind of feel the same way as you do.
    Well anyway I loved your poem.

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    Re: Our love (Poem)

    That was long! I think you should actually make it into a song. You can even put tabs from another song to it. I love it. Only when i think of it as a song. Cuz it is really long! Very sensual. Almost teasing!

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