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May 02, 2008, 10:38 PM
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 Credits: 1,750 | with out you Every time i think I dont know what to do The only thing that comes up in my head are all the thoughs of you It makes me think it makes me sad that you just left me here to be so sad to go somewhere and not tell me why I would follow you anywhere Even if to die .....
__________________ In the Darkness i walk alone..........  sig by Akura13 |
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May 05, 2008, 02:50 PM
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 Upcoming Legend  Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: The deepest Abyss of the Ocean
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Credits: 21,262 | Re: with out you i like this it shows a side of vulnerablility and sadness, but i suggest you put punctuations in between the phrases to make it look cleaner and will give the sentence the appearance that it is shorter.
__________________ Angels dare to go where devils don't dare to tread.  Clan Rainstorm 2nd Company, Kunoichi Leader click to show spoiler Last edited by gren; May 05, 2008 at 06:38 PM. Reason: removed quoted poem |
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May 06, 2008, 11:22 AM
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