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May 02, 2008, 10:38 PM
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 | with out you Every time i think I dont know what to do The only thing that comes up in my head are all the thoughs of you It makes me think it makes me sad that you just left me here to be so sad to go somewhere and not tell me why I would follow you anywhere Even if to die .....
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May 05, 2008, 02:50 PM
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 Rogue Vamp Slayer/Fallen  Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: I am in between Heaven's Gate and Hell.Angels are not supposed to fall but i did.
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| Re: with out you i like this it shows a side of vulnerablility and sadness, but i suggest you put punctuations in between the phrases to make it look cleaner and will give the sentence the appearance that it is shorter.
__________________ "In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends." Clan Rainstorm 2nd Company, Kunoichi Leader  PhoenixSara Myspace / Click Me IMVU/Atlantis RPG/Rules and FAQ/MY BLOG / Last edited by gren; May 05, 2008 at 06:38 PM. Reason: removed quoted poem |
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May 06, 2008, 11:22 AM
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