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    with out you

    Every time i think
    I dont know what to do
    The only thing that comes up in my head
    are all the thoughs of you
    It makes me think
    it makes me sad
    that you just left me here
    to be so sad
    to go somewhere and not tell me why
    I would follow you anywhere
    Even if to die .....

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    Re: with out you

    i like this it shows a side of vulnerablility and sadness, but i suggest you put punctuations in between the phrases to make it look cleaner and will give the sentence the appearance that it is shorter.
    Last edited by gren; May 05, 2008 at 06:38 PM. Reason: removed quoted poem
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    Re: with out you

    Quote Originally Posted by runebearer00 View Post
    Every time i think
    I dont know what to do
    The only thing that comes up in my head
    are all the thoughs of you
    It makes me think
    it makes me sad
    that you just left me here
    to be so sad
    to go somewhere and not tell me why
    I would follow you anywhere
    Even if to die .....
    lol this is really really really good XD .... u should rite more

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