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Old Mar 06, 2008, 05:05 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Is It Over?

Is It Over?

His heart is made of gold
While hers has fallen apart
Yet even with all the little pieces
He’s the one she fell in love with

He’s not perfect
But to her he’s everything
He’s the one she always thinks about
And the one she doesn’t want to leave behind

His attitude changes
Right before her eyes
From gentle and loving
To mean and hurtful

He doesn’t hit her physically
But emotionally she’s damaged
It’s during these times
That she wants to hold him close

Yet she doesn’t move closer
She only moves further away
Not physically but mentally and emotionally
Preparing her self for the pain that is soon to come

It comes anyway
Making her cry and walk away
As she makes decisions
That she’ll regret later

However maybe it’s for the best
What is she to do?
To her, it is unknown
And now she cries in her room all alone
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Old Mar 06, 2008, 12:54 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Is It Over?

theres alot of depression in ur poem but its really good( just out of curosity did something like this happen to u)
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Old Mar 06, 2008, 01:17 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Re: Is It Over?

Wow... This poem is something worth reading into because this happen quite a while *looks around*, as i can tell this poem does have deppression as well deep sadness.
I want you to make a positive change into this please because i do not want a poem to be hurtful in people's mind if that person reads it over again and again.
It is a simple suggestion only you can follow it or ignore if you wish to, i am not that typical when it comes to these types of poems, please do keep on improving the feelings in this area. ^_^
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Old Mar 08, 2008, 10:54 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Yes.. this happened to me.. -looks away- by more than one person...

I'll try dark1angel... But this poem is staying the way it is..
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Old Mar 08, 2008, 11:36 AM   #5 (permalink)
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wow that was good. there was alot of emotion in it.
i really liked it and the flow was great.

keep up the good work.
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Old Mar 13, 2008, 01:03 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Yes.. this happened to me.. -looks away- by more than one person...

I'll try dark1angel... But this poem is staying the way it is..
im sorry thats one thing about life that sucks and hope u feel better
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aww such emotion in this i know i have wrote anything in a while but wow i can really relate to this poem . and i understand what its like and how its about i hope your heart mends soon jamie
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