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    Is It Over?

    Is It Over?

    His heart is made of gold
    While hers has fallen apart
    Yet even with all the little pieces
    He’s the one she fell in love with

    He’s not perfect
    But to her he’s everything
    He’s the one she always thinks about
    And the one she doesn’t want to leave behind

    His attitude changes
    Right before her eyes
    From gentle and loving
    To mean and hurtful

    He doesn’t hit her physically
    But emotionally she’s damaged
    It’s during these times
    That she wants to hold him close

    Yet she doesn’t move closer
    She only moves further away
    Not physically but mentally and emotionally
    Preparing her self for the pain that is soon to come

    It comes anyway
    Making her cry and walk away
    As she makes decisions
    That she’ll regret later

    However maybe it’s for the best
    What is she to do?
    To her, it is unknown
    And now she cries in her room all alone
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Re: Is It Over?

    theres alot of depression in ur poem but its really good( just out of curosity did something like this happen to u)

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    Re: Is It Over?

    Wow... This poem is something worth reading into because this happen quite a while *looks around*, as i can tell this poem does have deppression as well deep sadness.
    I want you to make a positive change into this please because i do not want a poem to be hurtful in people's mind if that person reads it over again and again.
    It is a simple suggestion only you can follow it or ignore if you wish to, i am not that typical when it comes to these types of poems, please do keep on improving the feelings in this area. ^_^

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    Re: Is It Over?

    Yes.. this happened to me.. -looks away- by more than one person...

    I'll try dark1angel... But this poem is staying the way it is..
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Re: Is It Over?

    wow that was good. there was alot of emotion in it.
    i really liked it and the flow was great.

    keep up the good work.

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    Re: Is It Over?

    Quote Originally Posted by BrokenLover101 View Post
    Yes.. this happened to me.. -looks away- by more than one person...

    I'll try dark1angel... But this poem is staying the way it is..
    im sorry thats one thing about life that sucks and hope u feel better

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    Re: Is It Over?

    aww such emotion in this i know i have wrote anything in a while but wow i can really relate to this poem . and i understand what its like and how its about i hope your heart mends soon jamie

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