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    Over and Over and Over

    I fill your cup.
    But you just spill it.

    we made a life.
    But we slowly kill it.

    You make me smile.
    But I make you frown.

    So, I dissapear.
    But you hunt me down.

    You never thought I was a keeper.
    You've come to push the knife in deeper.

    Over and over, you remind me.
    Why its so hard to put my past behind me.

    I wanted to make our connection stronger.
    You wanted me to suffer longer.

    To lock my heart inside a vault.
    To feel like this is all my fault.

    Not just unwanted, but unneeded.
    You want me gone? You have succeeded.

    Just because I breathe, and still bleed red.
    Doesn't mean I don't wish I was dead.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    This poem actually scares me!!!! But thats just makes the fun of it! It's so cool!!!!! I guess that why it's so good to me!!!! Hope to see more!!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    I donno that I would call it -scarey-.. But it's definately sad.

    I'm jealous of your ability to -rhyme- and tell a story at the same time.

    I think this is my favorite thus far of your recent works.

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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    I donno that I would call it -scarey-.. But it's definately sad.

    I'm jealous of your ability to -rhyme- and tell a story at the same time.

    I think this is my favorite thus far of your recent works.
    Well yeah thats true! But it still RULES ANYWAY!!!!!! This poem was so touching to me so I hope to see more again!!!! Really
    Last edited by KuwiRules145; May 23, 2007 at 12:42 PM.
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    well... thank you both. And bratling, I didnt know you even read my work. That makes me feel better. ^_^. Sorry my stuff has been so sad, just a funk that Im in, I'll try to lighten it up.
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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    i like this pome becuase its so direct and straight forward
    and the fact that people actually treat you so different and make
    you feel so dead inside and confused about there feelings for you
    make it worse.

    this pome is really good and makes you think back on things
    you probably didnt see before and i like that and i got alot from this
    pome but what i got more than anything was how life and people seem
    to just toss you to the side till you just want to curl up in a ball and cry
    your life away.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    Quote Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice View Post
    i like this pome becuase its so direct and straight forward
    and the fact that people actually treat you so different and make
    you feel so dead inside and confused about there feelings for you
    make it worse.

    this pome is really good and makes you think back on things
    you probably didnt see before and i like that and i got alot from this
    pome but what i got more than anything was how life and people seem
    to just toss you to the side till you just want to curl up in a ball and cry
    your life away.
    O' man... you have quite the insight. That deserves a request to join my network. Needless to say you hit the nail on the head with that one.
    Thank you for taking the time to feel and respond how you have.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Over and Over and Over

    well most of your poems seems to imply the same meaning @_@ I feel so depress yet at the same time awed by your rhyming ability (it's something that i can never master T_T) such a sad poem..

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