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    An overwhelming life!

    Confusion , frustration , aggravation ,
    its what we go through everyday ,
    let the music play on , let it take
    your worries away once again , things
    will be better , yeah sure they will.


    Retaliation , identification , solitude ,
    its how we live , how we define who we
    are nothing will keep that loneliness
    away forever , let the music play
    on , things could be better then again
    who knows , only god does.

    Creation , inspiration , desperation ,
    you don't even know what life is about
    as you go through life always thinking the world
    is against you , always acting like your going
    to die because you don't realise whats going on.

    Some times things just seem so angry and
    bleak why cant you see its just how things are,
    there has always been conflict , you shouldn't
    be so surprised as things just keep going and the
    world keeps spinning.

    Equation , amplification , deafening , its
    all to much some times your senses get an
    over load and you go over the edge , why have
    you gone so far refusing to let things go away?,
    just let life go don't try and work things to where
    they work just for you.
    .................................................. ...................

    this poem is about how people go through life
    trying to make since of things when all they should try
    to do is accept what they have , though for some striving
    to be the best can be overwhelming and can hurt more than
    help.

    comments and sugestions are welcomed
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    hey thats a great poem i think it really discribes how most people live there lives and i'd like to see another one like this its cool

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    Very nice poem it helps me think about life and people hope 2 hear more from you, and keep it up write more poems

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    A really great poem again Chris ^^ I like it very much and I agree with all that is said in it- the main thing is to understand what you have and to enjoy your life as it is, with all that's good and bad.

    I really liked this part: "let the music play on , let it take your worries away once again" and the second time too... It just made this poem into a song, into something where you can hide- disappear in a poem just as you disappeare in a song...

    I really enjoyed reding this poem!!! Great work!!! ^^

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    im glad everyone liked this poem and i am
    trying a new way of doing them i know there
    are still a few grammer errore and stuff but im
    hoping this new theme im going for helps me out a bit.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    Quote Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice View Post
    Equation , amplification , deafening , its
    all to much some times your senses get an
    over load and you go over the edge , why have
    you gone so far refusing to let things go away?,
    just let life go don't try and work things to where
    they work just for you.
    Thats my favorite part... Somtimes I try to make myself deaf to the world around me. It never works for me though.
    Maybe I shouldnt try to work things ... just like you said.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: A over whelming life!

    yeah things turn out better when you dont
    try it might sound simplistic but its true
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: An overwhelming life!

    I like this poem cause it's makes sense and you're right people should be happy with what they have instead of taking it for granted. Good job sweetie.
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