JefferyXie

In life there are things that you can avoid
But there is one that you cannot evade
It's name is Pain
It is out there to seek and erase.

Pain is everywhere you go
It hears and sees everything
And it strikes constantly
No matter where you are.

Pain is around when there is war
Pain is around when there is love
Pain is around when there is freedom
Pain is everywhere around us.

Yet despite the troubles that Pain causes
There is something that Pain shows us
The definition of strength
And the definition of character

Yes it is strange to consider Pain
In another light despite what it causes
But yes,a person that is neutral
Will understand its existance.

Now it is time to release Pain from duty
After exploring its many characteristics
But it is not the last time
That you hear the existance of Pain.


yeah..that is it.it is the first poem i have ever written.please enjoy and comment.suggest ways i can improve this..your views will help me.

RayMe

The existance of pain.. hmm to feel that is the most unwanted feeling...
nice poem ^^

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Lotski

nice! the poem you made describes PAIN very well..
if this is your first poem ever, not bad..
you made a good start, so keep it up!

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elie26

Nice first poem It took me forever to make an "acceptable" poem xD
This part is so true-

Pain does show us and make us learn from our mistakes ^^ Hope to read more!