Thread: Pain

Wow! Very nicely done! If this is crappy, then I need to start eating my afro. LOL.

Naw, seriously though I like it. You found different ways to describe your pain, while still putting the word 'pain' to use. It was a small bit repetitive, but still well written, none-the-less.

Kudos, good job, mad props and all that jazz!

~S

I didn't think it was crappy either. I think it's very well written and it gets the way you feel out pretty clearly which aleways to me makes a good poem. It even flowed rhythmically.

its not creepy in a bad way its creepy in an awsome way

The words are very grounded and have a strong effect to them.......and they go greatly with the title.....
Nicely done!!!

*nods* good... very good!!! At first sight I though I won't enjoy it because there is too much repetition, but I was wrong, because the repetitions change in each stranza, so it's nice...

And the pain that you describe... boy do I know that feeling. I especialy love the last lines:

Why must I suffer
Why must I see
Why must I hear

I feel like that too sometimes and this just reminded me of that and... well sometimes it's nice to remember even if it is a bad thing...

A really nice work ^^ I hope to see more and I hope next time you have the wish to go deeper...