Pain Ambition

*hellknight* · Jan 29, 2007, 10:43 AM

You have ignored my feelings
You have upset me
Why you done this
Can you see?

You had my trust
But, you burned it in the fire
My mind crush
You called me a liar

Who is there for the blame
Your evil hear is twisted
You destroyed my name
I should have resisted

My faith falling down
Am in fear
Hiding in town
Am no longer here

I ran away
You pushed me
Finding somewhere to stay
I won't have to worry

You made me bleed
Pulled my hair
OUt of my skull
Nobody cared

You were never the same
All you gave me was disaster
My destiny blow's in flame
How much I hated her

I had no chance
I had no place
I never felt
So disgrace

I wanted to kill
Only you
For revenge
But, what did you do?

Gods_Dragon · Jan 29, 2007, 10:58 AM

Nice, it emits pain yet the cause is left a mystery. I like it, keep up the good work.

*BlueFox1* · Jan 29, 2007, 11:01 AM

Wow! Nice job on writing this Hellknight! Keep up the good work and you are well on you way to becoming a great writer!

*hellknight* · Jan 29, 2007, 01:06 PM

hey thanks blue and dragon apprecaite it. am gonna do a love poem next i guess, but i don't know where to start lol

*equinn* · Jan 30, 2007, 01:22 PM

aww that poem is kinda sad yet angry is that what u were feeling at the time ??? but anyway the poems really good ^__^

*Spin Da Ish* · Jan 30, 2007, 01:24 PM

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Originally Posted by equinn

aww that poem is kinda sad yet angry is that what u were feeling at the time ??? but anyway the poems really good ^__^

just saying but ever since me and hellknight became friends he is an angry person lol any way i like it and it was really easy to understand which i liked nice poem man

*hellknight* · Jan 31, 2007, 12:53 PM

thanks equinn and kid, am gonna call you that kid, sounds better lol

*CherryBlossom18* · Jan 31, 2007, 05:00 PM

That was a good poem. It was a dark story about how one feels after someone they thought cared about them suddenly turns on them and the revenge that lies in store for that person. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one.

*hellknight* · Feb 01, 2007, 10:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CherryBlossom18

That was a good poem. It was a dark story about how one feels after someone they thought cared about them suddenly turns on them and the revenge that lies in store for that person. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one.

Thank you so much CB, hope you really enjoyed the poem, and thank you for the support.

*Familyguyfan2* · Feb 01, 2007, 10:48 AM

I like the poem too! It is dark,but good. Keep up the good work

*hellknight* · Feb 01, 2007, 01:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Familyguyfan2

I like the poem too! It is dark,but good. Keep up the good work

thanks Family apprecatied lol, and same goe's for you

Jan 29, 2007, 10:43 AM	#1 (permalink)
hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Somewhere in SD. Posts: 1,597 Thanks: 7 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 24,195	Pain Ambition You have ignored my feelings You have upset me Why you done this Can you see? You had my trust But, you burned it in the fire My mind crush You called me a liar Who is there for the blame Your evil hear is twisted You destroyed my name I should have resisted My faith falling down Am in fear Hiding in town Am no longer here I ran away You pushed me Finding somewhere to stay I won't have to worry You made me bleed Pulled my hair OUt of my skull Nobody cared You were never the same All you gave me was disaster My destiny blow's in flame How much I hated her I had no chance I had no place I never felt So disgrace I wanted to kill Only you For revenge But, what did you do?
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Jan 29, 2007, 10:58 AM	#2 (permalink)
Gods_Dragon Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Zion Posts: 240 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 593	Re: Pain Ambition Nice, it emits pain yet the cause is left a mystery. I like it, keep up the good work. __________________ Thanks for the avatar & sig Rave_Grip you rock! There is but one judge... ~Stay blessed
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BlueFox1 Devoted Otaku Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,286	Re: Pain Ambition Wow! Nice job on writing this Hellknight! Keep up the good work and you are well on you way to becoming a great writer! __________________
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hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Somewhere in SD. Posts: 1,597 Thanks: 7 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 24,195	Re: Pain Ambition hey thanks blue and dragon apprecaite it. am gonna do a love poem next i guess, but i don't know where to start lol
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equinn Ao's official cat girl~★ Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Emerald island (Eire) (Ireland) Posts: 1,681 Thanks: 11 Thanked 30 Times in 28 Posts Credits: 19,781	Re: Pain Ambition aww that poem is kinda sad yet angry is that what u were feeling at the time ??? but anyway the poems really good ^__^ __________________ Lizzie + Phil together for 8 months! and to be longer! WOOP! http://neko-panda.deviantart.com/
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hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Somewhere in SD. Posts: 1,597 Thanks: 7 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Credits: 24,195	Re: Pain Ambition thanks equinn and kid, am gonna call you that kid, sounds better lol
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,616	Re: Pain Ambition That was a good poem. It was a dark story about how one feels after someone they thought cared about them suddenly turns on them and the revenge that lies in store for that person. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one. __________________ "Sunset Kisses Along The Beach" Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice Thanks so much I love it!
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Familyguyfan2 racist ppl suck Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Malvern,AR Posts: 1,048 Thanks: 15 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Credits: 5,408	Re: Pain Ambition I like the poem too! It is dark,but good. Keep up the good work
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