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    Pain Ambition

    You have ignored my feelings
    You have upset me
    Why you done this
    Can you see?

    You had my trust
    But, you burned it in the fire
    My mind crush
    You called me a liar

    Who is there for the blame
    Your evil hear is twisted
    You destroyed my name
    I should have resisted

    My faith falling down
    Am in fear
    Hiding in town
    Am no longer here

    I ran away
    You pushed me
    Finding somewhere to stay
    I won't have to worry

    You made me bleed
    Pulled my hair
    OUt of my skull
    Nobody cared

    You were never the same
    All you gave me was disaster
    My destiny blow's in flame
    How much I hated her

    I had no chance
    I had no place
    I never felt
    So disgrace

    I wanted to kill
    Only you
    For revenge
    But, what did you do?

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    Nice, it emits pain yet the cause is left a mystery. I like it, keep up the good work.


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    Re: Pain Ambition

    Wow! Nice job on writing this Hellknight! Keep up the good work and you are well on you way to becoming a great writer!

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    hey thanks blue and dragon apprecaite it. am gonna do a love poem next i guess, but i don't know where to start lol

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    aww that poem is kinda sad yet angry is that what u were feeling at the time ??? but anyway the poems really good ^__^

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    Quote Originally Posted by equinn View Post
    aww that poem is kinda sad yet angry is that what u were feeling at the time ??? but anyway the poems really good ^__^
    just saying but ever since me and hellknight became friends he is an angry person lol any way i like it and it was really easy to understand which i liked nice poem man

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    thanks equinn and kid, am gonna call you that kid, sounds better lol

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    Re: Pain Ambition

    That was a good poem. It was a dark story about how one feels after someone they thought cared about them suddenly turns on them and the revenge that lies in store for that person. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one.
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